Reviews for A Bit of Light StalkingBy : LovelessHope |
I absolutely adored this story! It could do with a small bit of spelling and grammar check but otherwise I have no complaints. Other than that, it was VERY well written and I love how well you captured the personalities of the characters, even when changing how they normally act. Through most of it, I could hear and picture the actual characters. I really enjoyed the transition of cruelty and malice in Malfoy to the tenderness and love, as though there were a war in his own mind. Keep up the great work! I look forward to reading more of your stories. :D
Your story has good pacing and I like the plot however you seem to have forgotten about magic in return for focusing on teh smut. Like why did the portraits not object to being taken down- if they were magical they should have been moving and have emotions? If Hermione objected to a peephole why didnt she just magic it away? in fact, why didnt she just magic herself a shirt?? Why does Draco only use muggle methods to stalk her when he could be using charms and magic to stalk her? Wouldnt Dracos house, a pure blood house of an ex-deatheater, have several charms on it to protect it: and he never even noticed when Hermione walked up to his house- like doesnt he have an alarm spell so he doesnt just open the door to anybody ? Like how did Hermione even know where Draco lives? why would she go to him of all people? and of course the fact that Ron is just a complete 180 on his normal personailty...but I guess u will explain that?
Oh this is fantastic! Please continue this story. I get so unbelievably sad when stories are left to go dry and this has such wonderful potential.
Also I am not a fan of Ron in general so this plot is just delicious validation to someone like myself.
Thank you!!
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