Reviews for Book One - Master Mine: A Lesson in SubmissionBy : Lissa & snowblind12 |
I’m just in love with Lucius now. Even though I know she’s to end up with Severus... I’m going to root against him now...
Delicious, as usual. Yeah, not a ton of feedback on this site, but you have a lot of dragon prints. I would guess there are a lot of followers of this story.
The chapter was well worth the wait, as always!! I’m just about ready to shake Hermione; yes, she has an animal attraction with Sev, but what she’s developing with Lucius is the basis for something lifelong. They’re in love and she doesn’t even know it.
Ok. So I’ve been following this story for it’s entirity. I’ve loved the insight into your setting and clothes designing and I have to admit that I scooped out your tumblr and the advice on writing and reviewing gave me some clarity and courage to review. Please keep in mind that I am not a writer but I do have an active and well fed imagination. With that being said, I love what the two of you are doing with this story! I’m a sucker for a good love triangle and/or triad. I also love the writing style developed by this partnership. I would like to see Hermione explore the small dominant side that was shown in this chapter, orchestrated and overseen by Lucius of course. Maybe the new female dom could help out? Just an idea! Keep up the excellent work!
Oh, I do hope that you continue to post on this site!! I have reread this entire story twice while waiting for chapter 16 and you did not disappoint!
I hope you continue to post on this site. I find it easy to read and navigate on here. Such a good story!
Ha Tinny not Tilly, bloody stupid autocorrect!
Woo hoo glad to see you back ladies! Another cracking chapter. I think I'm falling in love with Lucius Malfoy more with every chapter. Love the fact that there's no mention of Snape, it's great to see the relationship building between Hermione and Lucius without Snape rearing his ugly (or handsome, whichever way you think of him) head, it's allowed for Hermione's character to come out more! The detail you put into Hermione's room was spectacular! Eagerly awaiting the next chapter (as always 😂😂) x P.S I think I'm in love with Tilly too x
Ahhhh - so sorry for not reviewing earlier. I LOVE LOVE LOVE these two last chapters! Now, I'm still totally #TeamSnape ...because ALWAYS. BUT I am simultaneously falling HARD in love with Lucius. If I haven't said it before, I find the language you use absolutely stunning and beautiful. Not like anything I have ever read online before. It's exquisite! I have also for the first time ever missed my train stop because I was so lost in the story (oops for a massive 12,000-words-underestimation) - don’t worry, no big deal, the train back came immediately :) Wishing you a very happy Christmas and soon looking forward to more!!!
If you guys are seriously not feeling the love here, I will gladly follow this story on another site! Great chapter, as always, and I was especially happy to see another Draco appearance!!
Hey... no one is a stranger to life happening and changing plans! Great update, as always.. though I do wonder if Master Lucius will be able to keep his heart out of it for too much longer...
Oh my gosh! I love this story so much! I love the dynamic between Hermione and Draco, your Draco is how I always imagined he would be after the war, fun and cheeky. Is it wrong that I hope Hermione doesn't end up with Snape? Lucius is being so lovely to her! My only complaint is that you need to write faster 😉I check every day to see if you have posted the next chapter. Totally loving 'A World Not Fit To Live In' too! Look forward to the next chapters in both x
Imagine my surprise to catch up on Two chapters! Charlie, Charlie, Charlie!! I knew it wouldn’t work but I still found myself happy that she finally had a good experience outside of the Dungeon. I’m still in love with the thought of her and Draco.. so playful, but I’m honestly starting to feel bad for Lucius. The every day man would have said “Your Loss” by now and have felt no remorse. He’s so in love with her and still willing to wait for Sev to pull his head out of his ass. Wonderful work as always ladies!! Heart you too!! 💚💚
Yes, that little taste of Draco was satisfying. Glad to hear there will be more to come. Lucius is quite yummy as well, so I look forward to the training process. I have a feeling it is going to be a long 48 hours for Hermione.
SQUEEEEEE!!!! You're correct, more plot and intrigue! Definitely made my day when I checked if there was an update. You two do wonderful work, I personally want to slap some sense into Snape, but I'm a busy woman and don't have that much free time. 😜
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