Reviews for Book One - Master Mine: A Lesson in SubmissionBy : Lissa & snowblind12 |
Help! You're making me come to late for work! I sooo hope Severus is gonna come around and learn how to do emotions :D I'm growing fond of Lucius and his sweetness, but I'm still all #TeamSnape - a little secret smut date night between Snape & HG maybe? The old forbidden fruit is always best :D
I just binged this fic the last two days and I'm obsessed! I am more into Draimione but I'm low key into this whole Hermione/Snape and Hermione/Lucius thing. I can't wait for the best upload!
💗💗 looking forward to the next chapter!!!
I got to the end of chapter 12, and all I can think was, “NOOO! I’m all caught up, but I need more!” I literally spent the day at work rereading from the beginning to refresh my memory, before reading all the new chapters I hadn’t gotten to yet. I’m loving this story! Even shared it with one of my boyfriends. :D I’ve always been a Snape/hermione fan. But with this story I’m kinda wanting a threesone between her, Severus, and Lucious. With a little more Draco on the side. >.> I am so looking forward to your next update, and your break from school. Also, shout out to your amazing co-author and your betas. :3
-SakuraStars
Ooh. That will be exciting when Lucius agrees to train her. I still look forward to more Draco. Their scene was hot. It was my favourite. I need more Draco! Just throwing that out there. I did enjoy this chapter as well, but could see where it would be frustrating for a sub to have to direct all the action. The formatting was weird for this chapter. Don’t know if anyone else had issues, but on my iPad, the words were not contained in the box. They ran over the edge on the right hand side.
This is my favorite chapter so far - I love the Snermione interactions with viewpoints from both of them!
I’m definitely still on board and I freaking boo-hoo’d! Poor, poor Hermione! Gosh, I’m still wiping tears from my eyes. Snape is such a freaking idiot & I wonder if Lucius can see that he himself is falling for her, too.. I’m already looking forward to the next update!! I heart you guys, too! 😘😘
I was so happy to find a good Bdsm story. You're a very good writer. I just wanted to comment about chapters 10 and 11. Because they didn't make much sense to me.
I'm a sub myself in real life. And Hermione found herself in the Bdsm world, it was beautiful. But when she and Snape finally had sex, it was so... vanilla... It was a little disappointing, not hot at all. And Hermione found the vanilla sex so amazing. For me it didn't make sense. If she didn't fell pleasure at all with vanilla sex so far... Why did she find vanilla sex with Snape so amazing?? And Snape, a Master that has a Bdsm house, and lives this world in a daily bases... You would suppose that he would like sex with a little Bdsm touch at least... And in chapter 11... It is well now in Bdsm that the vast majority of subs and slaves loves their Dons and Masters very deeply. Why Snape thought that Hermione didn't love him? Only because she wanted him to be her Master? What did he want? A vanilla relationship with her?? If she found herself in the Bdsm world, he wanted her to leave it behind to be his vanilla girlfriend? And Snape, he is a Master, but only for girls he doesn't love? And when he finds love he will leave the Bdsm scene and will be a common vanilla boyfriend?? For a Master (!) it is very unlikely. I didn't understand... But, I don't know... As a sub and slave, I (sadly sometimes) only find sex amazing if it's Bdsm sex. I do have vanilla sex sometimesbut it's... Bleh... Nothing spectacular at al... I can't have orgasms with vanilla sex. I crave the Bdsm interaction in bed. And I thought Hermione felt the same... Was I wrong?
Well, these were my considerations to the story. I hope you don't find it was a criticism. I was just hoping to collaborate as someone who lives this world, and has the same desires as Hermione. I totally saw myself in her in the first chapters. But the last two chapters were a cold bucket for me. I couldn't relate to Hermione and Snape in them.
And I hope my English is ok, I'm Brazilian... Haha
I'm anxious for the next chapter.
I am so sorry I haven't revived lately, RL has gotten in the way of course, lol.
I still wait with bated breath for every update to all three of the stories you two have out right now! I love the way this one is going, the emotions this lifestyle can produce are both intense and frightening. It takes very strong people on both ends of the whip to live, love, survive and thrive.
I sincerely hope Severus can get his head out of his ass before Hermione hits her drop, she's gonna need him!
Thank you Both
Kitty5tatts
Ahhh you guys have me hooked! Who would've thought I would get all teary over Lucius Malfoy being so caring and compassionate! Is there more Draco coming up? I really loved your fun side of him. You have my heart breaking for poor Hermione, I hope she kicks Snake's butt soon! Eagerly awaiting your next chapter x
Loved this chapter! Maybe Severus finally will get his head on straight!
Omg! I don’t know if I wanted to scream “Finally” or “That Effing A-hole!” I love reviewing because I know how important feedback is! I’m definitely curious as to what happens next! Write On! ✊️🤘✍️
I think her scene with Danny might be the wake up call that Sev needs to get serious and train her himself. Especially considering her wants something lasting with her. Kudos to Luc for deciding to step aside for Sev! Loved the update, as always!! 😘😘
LOL Daniel Radcliff! This was a great chapter, and I have to applaud Severus to owning up to his shit so quickly. I do feel a bit sorry for Lucius though, but it seems he is a good friend.
I loved how, even though he’s not dominant, he still couldn’t resist another round in the hall! Their scene was soooo good and that’s exactly what Snape gets!!
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