Reviews for Book One - Master Mine: A Lesson in SubmissionBy : Lissa & snowblind12 |
I only made an account to review your story - this is the best fan fiction story I've read in 10 years of ready fan fiction. I want to buy a book with this story :-D Please?
I really enjoyed the con/non-con between Draco and Hermione. I don’t know what that says about me, but oh well. Why do I get the feeling this was a one-time event? It’s not too late to make it full of Dramione. 😉
Bwahahahaha, that was perfect!
I'm conflicted. On the one hand, Shape' s behavior is completely inappropriate and could cause serious damage to a submissive (as Lucius is well aware of). On the other hand, it provides a perfect turning point and is great for the plotline! Luckily, in fiction you are able to take what could be a seriously dangerous situation and circumvent the negative repercussions and find something resembling a happily ever after. I can't wait to read Draco's scene (Concentual non-concent is a favorite of mine)
Omg I really like your fanfiction, it's amazing ! I can't wait to read next chapter ;)
Yass! Draco and Hermione! I cannot wait to read their scene. Big bad Death Eater and the Mudblood. I hope he helps her forget about Snape.
Snape’s head is sooo far up his butt, his shoulders are trying to get in! I knew I was right about Draco! I hope he can seriously make it worth her while and take her mind off of the witless wonder for a while...
I am loving this story! I am not a part of the lifestyle, but am interested in it, and enjoy reading about it - especially when done in what appears to be a very respectful way. I'm excited to read more!
Mistress_V
Gosh I love this story, I was genuinly dissapointed that there wasn't any more to read. I actually made an account 'cause I need to know when there is more! I haven't figured out how to do that yet but I'm going to do my best :)
Thats such a good story so far I'm curious about how it will proceed. Good Job
Got sidetracked by real life, imagine that, lol Sorry for the delay in getting this to you
darlenegopp@mail.com
Loved the last chapter btw!!
Kitty5tatts
I just wanted to say I'm loving the story so far! I am part of the lifestyle and have been active in it for about 5 years now. I just have one little thing that bothered me when I got to the spanking scene in chapter 3. Severus says hermione has to obey what he says, since he is in the dominant role. I do not agree with his next statement that she must listen to commands any dominant gives her. Submission is something that is earned and given. No dominant can order around any submissive and expect them to listen. I understand what you are trying to convey here, but I believe it needs a little more clarification. Sometimes being new in the community, people can be taken advantage of and will believe what they are told by hearing something like this, it might lead her to believe she has to listen to anyone who identifies as dominant, which is not the case.
Eithef way, I will keep on reading it, because I love this pairing and your writing style is pleasant and draws me in. Also kudos to your beta/writing partner. :3
I love this story! I don't live this lifestyle personally, but I love reading about it. You definitely let the reader know why this would be so appealing. Keep it up!
You keep turning up the heat! The scene was hot, Snape is seriously in denial, while Draco may present an interesting twist! I'm excited to see where you take it next!
This chapter was so lovely, I have no words! I absolutely loved it! While I'm saddened that your chapters won't be coming as frequent, with as busy as your IRL is, I'm surprised you plan to post as often as you said! I can't wait to keep reading!
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