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Reviews for Harry Potter and the Hall of Justice

By : dwmerrell
  • From ANON - BookLady on July 08, 2005
    After reading the entire fic, I can't decide if I liked it or not. Although the writing was "above average" compared to most fanfic, it still read like an action/adventure porn film. I love smut and if there's some plot in there to keep me captivated, all the better. When they got all stealthy and armed I kinda cringed on the inside. I just loved the idea so much of good witches and wizards being pro-active against evil, I had to keep reading, hoping that it would redeem itself and I guess I felt it never did. As I said, I love smut, but this idea could have been so much more if the story had developed without it being so prominent (I can't believe I said that!). I realize that this is not going to be found on bookstore shelves, it's a fic and the writer has provided all of us readers with a pretty good read. I may not have loved every sentance, but I still read the whole thing and I can't say I wasn't entertained. I look forward to trying another fic of yours!
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  • From ANON - Eric Santos on July 05, 2005
    I wish that i could of read the origanal one, also. but i was wondering why such a let-downy ending. I think that you should continue it for the years inbetween the prolouge and the ending. but i give you no flames. i give you props.
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  • From ANON - rubberduck on June 26, 2005
    it seems to be writer bashing today. i just came from another story that is getting a few extremely critical comments. this is a forum to review the story you are reading, not attack the writer because you don't agree with their works. i've reviewed this story a couple times and have stated that i don't much like how the women are portrayed or how much gun fire is in here. but that doesn't mean i'm going to say the author should be killed. that's a bit out there. why would anyone say such a thing? it's a frigging story for crying out loud. stick to the material and leave the personal attacks out. dwmerrell, your stories are a bit extreme, gratuitous violence abounds in them, but they are exciting and thrilling. your use of grammar and spelling is good and the story flows well. i'm looking forward to more of saving jennifer and am kind of wondering whatever happened to 'harry potter and the occidental ranger'. i can understand your desire to fix up your story, but lets get your other stories back on track too. thanks for some interesting and fun reading.
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  • From ANON - dwmerrell on June 26, 2005
    This is fan fiction folks. The keyword here is "fiction". Writers of such works oftentime take liberties, drifting far from canon. We do this, of course, to tell our story, our way. We wouldn't read this stuff if all stories were exactly the same. The stories don't always come out the way we would wish them to. But it's our story, nonetheless.

    For instance, in my particular story Professor Dumbledore is a very manipulative guy. He's doing this for the good of humanity - - - the way he sees it. Reduced to its simplest form, he wants to accomplish two things before his passing on into the next adventure: First, he wants to mitigate the danger growing around them, not only for the magical world but the non-magical world as well, and he is willing to do whatever it takes to get that done. Second, he wishes to see born the next incremental step, the next jump, in mankinds evolutionary journey. Along the way he makes decisions questioned by many, even you.

    If you remember from the very beginning of the text, David Albus Potter asks himself "why did it have to be done this way?" - - - "wasn't there another way?". You see, young David Potter couldn't understand why the old Professor had taken such manipulative and dubious actions either. If you remember, Professor McGonagall and others were put out by the old headmaster's manipulations, too. He had gone too far.

    The story brings out at least two things inherently characteristic to mankind: absolute power corrupts absolutely; and, what I believe to be right is right, no matter what you say.

    Even though I don't always agree with the reviewers of my stories, I try to understand their point of view, seeing it from their eyes. Then again, there are those I can't or won't agree with. I do hope, though, for all who don't like my stories, you will find some that tickle your fansy. That's one of the great things about having great bunches of stories to choose from. Sooner or later we will find something that gets our blood pumping.

    Thanks for your reviews.
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  • From ANON - Eric Santos on June 24, 2005
    AWESOME cappie hope you continue along these lines
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  • From ANON - Eric Santos on June 08, 2005
    more more more
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  • From ANON - Eric Santos on June 01, 2005
    this is a good story even if you did not have the smutt it would be a good story. you should write a version without the smutt and post it on other websites so that kids who like harry potter would be able tto read it.
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  • From ANON - Desiree on May 27, 2005
    Excellent story, love the expansion of the Harry's world
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  • From ANON - THE FLAMER(just delet this if you like me) on May 16, 2005
    W/E
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  • From ANON - Anon on May 16, 2005
    i don't like to review before the story is over but you need to update more. you leave peaole hanging. any other reviewers out there agree with me say "HELL YA"
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  • From ANON - rubberduck on May 12, 2005
    i've been rereading your story and it's a nice refresher on your thrilling epic. i've finally gotten to the chapter that really sticks out in my mind being 'wrong': 'Nott's Castle'. when i first read it, harry tackled denise and from what i remember, pretty much forced himself on her. with your rewrite, at least he waits until he gets back to the hall of justice. while it's a bit better in that he doesn't so much as rape her, but harry still treats her like property. sure denise is moving from an evil master to hero, but she's still being treated like property. she isn't given a choice in the matter. i think that was my main objection before and sadly, it wasn't really changed. i don't expect you to change it again just for me though lol. it's your story and i just don't agree with this kind of aspect in the tale. let's face it, you can't please everyone and you shouldn't even try. this is your story and your world and you can do whatever you want. i know i haven't pleased everyone with my stories hehe. but i also think hearing other people's opinions, good or bad, is beneficial. it may help you out with something else. your story is all about action with some hot sex thrown in. i just think that you threw in the sex without really developing it. the sex has just been rather gratuitus, meaning if you took it out it wouldn't affect the overall story at all. the scenes with harry and hermione, or harry and ginny have been the most special because there is a relationship behind them. they come from somewhere. there was development and emotions attached to them instead of it just being lust. from my rereading, i can see a development between hermione and webster too, so that's good considering they're supposed to love each other too. just something to keep in mind, having sex in stories is good and all, but to really connect with the characters and be able to 'get into' the scene, it might help to have some emotional attachment to the union. instead of having people just jump at each other, have them flirt, tease, seduce and generally fall in love. it will make your sex scenes all the more hotter and give them more meaning.
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  • From ANON - Death in a Pink Boa on April 30, 2005
    Yay! anther chapter. Post again soon.
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  • From ANON - Blu Tears on April 24, 2005
    What, no sex! Come on. Harry and Hermy!!
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  • From ANON - Death in a Pink Boa on April 24, 2005
    WHY HAVEN'T YOU POSTED IN THE LAST TO DAYS?
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  • From ANON - Death in a Pink Boa on April 21, 2005
    it's not over till...the fat lady sings?
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