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By : ladydeathfaerie

From ANON - Lori on July 07, 2003
Holy bajeebers! That chapter was smokin! Two Severus's at once. Can you imagine?

So, will Severus be telling us just exactly how it is that he became such a great lover? Hmmm?
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From ANON - Laura on July 07, 2003
Wow! Brilliant story, and not at all difficult to get through in one read (as in, content/grammar). You have a knack for erotic fan fiction, especially with Snape (my favourite character by far). Can't wait to see if you have more planned for this story!

Nicely done :)

Laura
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From ANON - Kenly Sekuri on July 07, 2003
HA!!!! EYE TWITCH!!! *is giggling madly* LOVE IT!! ^.^ this just gets better and better. i must admit... double snape is interesting... that would kinda suck if one snape was in the middle of class and the other was getting it on with kendra... *giggles at the horrid possibilities* that would just be... wrong on so many levels. :P but, again, as always, i LOVE it! and i ADORE the EYE TWITCH!! ^.~ oh, and thanks bunches for helping me with my own story. you're a doll! *eye twitch* O.o *scampers off*
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From ANON - Kenly Sekuri on July 06, 2003
I guess I could quit telling you how much I like this at any time, huh? But guess what... I can't!! ^.^ The recient chapter was really good. Poor Kendra. Guess it serves her right, though. I think Lucius should get a taste of Snape's cynical side. ^.~
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From ANON - Simone on July 04, 2003
Dito to what avidreader said, very well said.
Especially "yes this is fantasy and yes rape hurts".
This is a fanfic playing with d/s, bondage and the like. These are things that some people like to do or read about.
People allyally liking to do this, do it with consenting partners. And I think the people who like reading about or writing about it, are well aware that rape hurts in real life and I think that neither the author nor us readers, who like this fic a lot, glorify rape. To imply otherwise is unfair.

I didn't like this chapter as well as the others. But this is connected to personal preference, namely that I like Draco with Ginny best and I dislike Lucius. I explained the author in an email, why I don't like Lucius and why I like Draco with someone else. And I'm sure she understands, her being the very clever being that wrote this fic that I like a lot.

Nevertheless, the smutty scenes were very well written, very steamy. I'm looking very much forward to more chapters.

Simone
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From ANON - avidreader on July 03, 2003
Ok just some observations about the last reviewers comments, yes this is fantasy and yes rape hurts. However this Kendra character seems to be one who enjoys the sexual dom/sub games. Chapter 8 with what you count as rape said the lust spell "It only enhanced desires you already had" and "If you didn't desire one of us, or both of us, the spell wouldn't work on you." Since the character is just starting to understand her sexual desires and that she seems to enjoy submission does not mean that she is going to have psychological trauma then swear off men. As for her never telling on Severus you forget she did kidnap and torture him. Yet you do not make any comments on him being psychologically traumatized? She no longer wants to be a plain jane why do you thihe hhe has transformed herself, as for the men comment you made she seems to like her men big, strong, and malicious even when she was the one dominating.

To me the only second thoughts Snape might have is why he did not return immediately to her. As for his chances for her I doubt that he is just going to let her go after what they have been through together. It seems he does care for her. Wanting her to use his name and such.
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From ANON - uptosomething on July 03, 2003
I know this is just a fantasy-and it's pretty well written-but do you know what kind of pain Kendra would be in after not just losing her virginity roughly to one man, and then being raped by another, but also being anally raped? She'd hurt for a week and bleed for days. The psychological traumald bld be such that she'd probably swear off men permanently. She'd never tell on Severus or the Malfoys because it would be her word against theirs and she'd be the one disgraced in the small world of wizarding. Draco and Lucius can dump her out the front door in the morning and laugh with impunity. My guess is that she'd become very withdrawn and go back to being a plain Jane, having learned that the men she tried to take on are just too big, too strong, and too malicious.

Snape is the one who might have second thoughts. He wouldn't dare try to punish Dobby, because he would never, never want Dumbledore to know that he'd tied up a girl in the dungeons. No "she asked for it" excuses would impress the Headmaster. However, it may occur to him that it's not exacting raining beautiful young virgins in the dungeons, and that if he had been the least decent to her, he might have had an actual chance with a girl who had secretly longed for his attentions. It would be funny if he ended up pining after her.
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From ANON - Kenly Sekuri on July 03, 2003
I knew the Malfoys would play a part somewhere. They're too evil not to. :P I sorta think Snape should prolly avenge her... Kinda... :P I love this, btw. Oh... You knew that, right? *eye twitch*
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From ANON - Sabrina on July 01, 2003
Last chapter was great! I need to see what happens next, so write, write, write!
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From ANON - Lori on July 01, 2003
Is it hot in here?!! Erotic torture! Wow! I hope you continue with this pace and that he doesn't get....mean, so to speak. I love surly Severus. Just not sick, psychopath Severus. LOL!
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From ANON - Simone on July 01, 2003
Perfect! This chapter was so what I wanted to read and more.
A stroke of genius to have her recite the potions instruction and him trying to get to react her. Slowly but sexy written, the way to her submission.
This makes it all the more believable and also more enjoyable to read. What use has dominant Snape if his partner starts submitting as soon as he flashes his cock and flicks a nipple once.
Please keep Kendra defiant and a little willful, makes the battle of wills with smut ensuing most delightful.

You had him use a potion on her.
I was going to suggest to have Snape use a potion on her yesterday, but wasn't sure if you'd want your Snape to rely on a potion, I figured he'd be the kind of man who wants responses based solely on himself. On the other hand, he's underhanded enough not to care. And it worked great in this chapter!

So here my suggestions for the next chapters:

- to avoid lovey-dovey-ness, how about Kendra taunting him either because she wants more sex and he can't follow through immediately (something a long the line of "Are you too old, Severus?"/"Can't a Slytherine keep up with a Gryffindor?") or that he had sex (and what great sex twice!) with a former student he always disliked or something else --> he gets angry and we get new smuttiness.

- after backmouthing, as a punishment he gives her a potion that surpresses her climax, either till he uses a spell to let her climax or till the potion wears off.

May I also ask a favor? During the next 5 days my job will take 12-13 hours a day, so in the night, when I come home I can't bear to see another computer screen. So if you were so nice to email me cha chapters that you might post during the next days (email-addy is above), so I can print them out at theice,ice, I'd really appreciate it. I can access my email from my office but not a homepage thats name includes "adult". Additionally I won't be able to feedback the next couple of days on this site, but please be sure that it's not on purpose that I don't feedback.

Vielen Dank for this chapter! And your doing really really great.

Simone
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From ANON - Kenly Sekuri on July 01, 2003
You know I love this, but I thought I'd tell you aga ^.^ ^.^ Is he gonna make her live in his room forever? At some point, Malfoy should be brought in. :P Maybe Snape has words with him or something? :P Again, GREAT! ^.^
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From ANON - Anon on July 01, 2003
I think there should be a lot of spanking involved. It's good cause it's painful and somewhat humiliating, but it's not damaging either.
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From ANON - Sabrina on July 01, 2003
I think Snape should give her a really good hard spanking. Especially since she's already lying on her stomach.
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From ANON - Anon on June 30, 2003
It's great! Please update soon!!!!
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