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Reviews for Harry Potter and War Against the Order

By : MashellBerry
  • From ameliasneed on December 04, 2013
    Wow! Great Story so far. I Feel that it is only going to get better here on out. Can you please send me a email when the next chapter is up? If so i really like that. I have a hard time finding this other wise. My Email is bloodrose2 @ hotmail .com Just put what the name of the story is so i don't throw it away. Thanks and keep up the really great work.
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  • From ANON - lyttylyst on March 03, 2005
    please update and email me or else. :-P
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  • From ANON - devilchild on February 13, 2005
    i like the story please keep updating!!!
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  • From ANON - jbfritz on June 05, 2004
    Great story! Can't wait to see more! Please email me when you update:)
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  • From ANON - lisa on April 10, 2004
    omg UPDATE please
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  • From ANON - Dante on March 23, 2004
    "Mr. Malfoy I assure you I am quiet cable of taking care of myself, I don't think a vampire will hurt me, or at least this one." Harry said amusement clear.

    Example of dismal word usage.

    Quiet : not loud
    Cable: A strong, large-diameter, heavy steel or fiber rope.
    Something that resembles such steel or fiber rope.


    QUITE : intense
    CAPABLE: able

    Example of dismal punctuation.

    Harry said amusement clear.

    There is NO punctuation in this phrase. Is Harry speaking? "Amusement clear" It makes no sense, but then neither does the sentence.

    Harry said, amusement clear. What was clear about the amusement? Was it in his voice? Was there a sign over his head? Was there a park with rides? Be clear and concise

    Try

    "Mr. Malfoy, I assure you I am quite capable of taking care of myself. I don't think a vampire will hurt me, at least this one." Harry said, with amusement in his voice.

    Commas are a good thing.

    Please, please get a beta. Please let your English teacher grade this. Please get help from someone. At the very least use the grammar and spelling check in Word.
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  • From ANON - Merrideth on March 04, 2004
    Are you going to finish this story? I really like what you have up so far. I'd like to see what happens next

    Merrideth
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  • From ANON - SerpentisStilus on January 25, 2004
    Awsomory ory so far! I can't wait to see what happens.
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  • From ANON - Leelee on January 11, 2004
    Oh i love it, awesome!

    hope you update soon and when you do, please send me a mail, Thanks
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  • From ANON - blubb-blubb on January 05, 2004
    Hi!
    I really like this story. the thing with evil order of the phoenix AND evil Voldie with Harry and friends in the middle is interesting. Do you intent on continuing? whould be really good.
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  • From ANON - Yve on September 18, 2003
    Ha! I love this story, I hope you update soon.
    More Power to the Multi!Harry storyline :-)
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  • From ANON - kimbra-fire on August 08, 2003
    Remus knows Muggle Defence?! That is so cool! And I agree with Remus about Sirius and cooking. In this other story I read, Sirius burnt the bacon and there was a grease fire. He put water onto it to put it out, but her just made it bigger!!!!! LOL In the end, it was Harry who put the fire out, it was hilarious b/c in the story Harry was a 10-11 year old I think. Love your story!!!!
    =^-^=
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  • From ANON - rabbit on August 08, 2003
    Interesting name you chose. I can finally understand why ff writers want reviews so badly. Please poeple R&R I need to know how good or bad I am at this betaing stuff. Oh, I'm not opposed to Harry having several different lovers but I think that he should at some point becoming H/D. Or you could put Draco with a Clone.
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  • From ANON - MichaelsLove on August 07, 2003
    Ok, I'm hooked! I came oss oss this today and read it in one sitting.
    I love the storyline and the introduction of all the new "peoples". I think Harry
    is well written, and love all the plot twists. As for who Harry should be paired with,
    I see your Harry as a pretty confident character who would be completely comfortable
    having several lovers of different races. Only my opiniooughough. Pls update soon,
    or I will go into withdrawl!
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  • From ANON - kimbra-fire on August 02, 2003
    It's cool that rabbit is your beta-reader. I don't think that I could do editing that well. But there's still something that's peculiar about the OotP and Voldemort. Why would Dumbledore go through all that trouble to have Devon work for him from America instea hav having someone else from the Order do it instead. Gah, this is too much for me! Lol, =^-^= But this chappie was funny though.
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