Reviews for Tension and FateBy : Nifty225 |
The setup is a little vague and awkward, but this story wasn’t about moving any HP plots or AUs forward. This was about moving the sexual exploration of typical teens (even wizard teens) forward, and is very well written.
A good start to ‘shipping’ Ron & Hermione, as well as Harty and Ginny. Not everyone likes JKR’s pairings, but they work for me. I always thought the HG pairing was inevitable: Lily Potter had red hair, so does Ginny; Ginerva is a variant of Guinevere, and Harry might be a variant of Arthur; Harry never had a real family, and the Weasleys practically adopted him, marrying Ginny makes him part of the only real family he’s ever known; Garry may have money, but he was deprived and raised as if he were poor, he doesn’t look down on the Weasleys because they’re not rich, in fact he admires how they all look out for each other; Harry somehow managed to save Ginny’s life, Arthur’s life, and maybe Eon’s, too. To put it simply, Ginny represents everything good that was missing from Harry’s life before he went to Hogwarts or met the Weasleys. Of course he fell for her! Well written, a few typos slipped through the editing, but keep at it, there is potential here!
A good start to ‘shipping’ Ron & Hermione, as well as Harty and Ginny. Not everyone likes JKR’s pairings, but they work for me. I always thought the HG pairing was inevitable: Lily Potter had red hair, so does Ginny; Ginerva is a variant of Guinevere, and Harry might be a variant of Arthur; Harry never had a real family, and the Weasleys practically adopted him, marrying Ginny makes him part of the only real family he’s ever known; Garry may have money, but he was deprived and raised as if he were poor, he doesn’t look down on the Weasleys because they’re not rich, in fact he admires how they all look
If you're going to 'ship' H/G and R/H, this is a great way to picture the start of things. Good images, and true to the characters of all four of them. My pet peeve is poor editing. There were way to many typos in the story; it wasn't too hard to figure out what was meant by the author, but it does ruin the flow of things for the reader when they have to stop and go "what did he/she mean by that?"
Don't let that stop you! I think the author has some chops and is capable of more!
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