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Reviews for Extreme Seduction

By : Elehyn1
  • From xxreighxx on February 27, 2012
    I tried to read this, but it's so utterly full of grammar mistakes that it's impossible to get through more than a paragraph before getting a headache. If your first language is not English, I guess I understand, but it's not that difficult to find a beta reader to edit your work, especially on fanfiction websites. If your first language is English, well then either you are not over the age of 18..because no one 18 and older could make mistakes as horrendous as the ones that I see in this fic, or you really need to go back to school.

    It's unfortunate, because the idea of the story has merit. I just can't read it because it's so grammatically messed up.
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  • From Lucyna40 on December 08, 2010
    You have a nasty habit of ending chapters at inopportune moments. How so, can you? This is sadism!!! Fortunately, the story is complete and I do not have to wait for subsequent chapters. I'd probably an entire manicure to the elbow ate.

    'Melting milk chocolate with whole nuts and almonds caramelized.'
    Elehyn I love you (actually I begin to praise you like I have to raise the floor xD)

    'Along the way, Harry heard Ron whispering repeatedly, something that sounded like, "I saw Snape naked. I saw Snape naked".'
    You are cruel! You Rona exposed to such trauma (and me abdominal pain).

    The last part surprised me. You did not explain how Harry and Snape have solved your problem. You once gave a brief final scene. What a pity. How would you embody several paragraphs from the whole story.
    The end crowns the work. Your work (no doubt excellent) could be a masterpiece ...

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  • From anniea on January 12, 2009
    that last bit was a surprise! please write again soon, i really like your work! *kisses*
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  • From darkwish on June 16, 2008
    Just so you know the site seems to be eating some of the words in your story. Either that or the typo monster has attacked you. This story is so good I'm really enjoying it so far and am almost done I hope you write more stories in English soon.
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  • From ANON - rulerofyaoi on November 14, 2006
    You are one of the best writters I have seen in this entire section. Your story is amazing, as well as the plot. You stroy flows and you end the story at the right point. Most stories I've read prolong the ending and add in unnecassary tidbits that are just for their amusement. I could not just read one chapter and be content. I am suprised though that it took such a turn, it was brilliant though. ( When Harry decided to seduce Severus) I am an immence fan of Severus Snape x Harry Potter and this story quenched my thirst. If you ever do need a beta for any story that you are editing, then just email me. ( Though I would prefer it to be malexmale, I am open to malexfemale. It would also help if I knew the Category {Harry Potter/ Naruto/ etc...}) Please do start another and I will be a devoted fan.
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  • From ANON - heksie on August 06, 2006
    Great fic. did like it a lot
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  • From ANON - G on December 12, 2005
    This was so beautiful! But if you're french, why didn't you make Sev murmer in French to Harry?
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  • From ANON - Lady Di on December 12, 2005
    It was a real "page turner" at the end. Very good. Nice combo of fluff and everything else. Great story.
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  • From ANON - JJ on November 24, 2005
    Thanks for the story!!!
    I enjoyed it, especially that speach from Ron to Harry about being his best friend and brother.
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  • From ANON - CrazyFanigrl on August 19, 2005
    Awww!!! that so sweet!
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  • From ANON - baconsux on July 11, 2005
    i'd give it a 6 out of 10. was alright
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  • From ANON - Reader on July 08, 2005
    Really great story. Fun and original.
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  • From AkumaKawa on June 19, 2005
    Awesome. Lots of grammer and spelling mistakes, and sometimes it was very hard trying to understand what was being said and so forth, but man this was great.

    Keep up the great work. Coolsa.
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  • From ANON - Erin on December 18, 2004
    I think you have an interesting premise here and I wanted to read more, but the typos and misspellings stopped me about halfway into the second chapter when it became incomprehensible to me. I understand that English is not your first language and there's certainly nothing wrong with that, however, you should get an English beta reader to go over this for you. Preferably someone with a firm grasp of grammar, punctuation and spelling and not someone who will tell you the story is great and wonderful no matter what is wrong with it. Those type of people can do a writer more harm than good.

    I hope you do have this betaed and reposted at some later date; I'd like to read the rest of this story and find out where you take the idea, how Harry deals with this and what more it does those around him.
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  • From ANON - Krystal on August 11, 2004
    Ummm.... Love it! Is there going to be more? *begs with puppy dog eyes*
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