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Reviews for Harry Potter and the Occidental Ranger

By : dwmerrell
  • From scwolf10k on September 01, 2004
    *Doing a new wonderful story dance* Woohoo! This is grrrrrreat!!! Austin is another kind of Daniel Webster! Yay! Well, except that Daniel was a Muggle *winks*
    It's great to see that you're writing this story. I really like it. With Austin's 'extraordinary' abilities, I think that all the Death Eaters will be vanished in no time and Harry will get to face Voldemort soon.
    Hermione should've given Lucius a punch just like the one she gave Draco in the movie PoA! That would've been "bloody brilliant!" lol!!!
    I hope to read more soon! Keep it up!!
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  • From scwolf10k on August 30, 2004
    Yay! another story!! I'm going to read this tonight and review it tomorrow!! *dances around happily*
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  • From ANON - rubberduck on June 24, 2004
    you certainly like to give your avenging characters power. they seem to be all powerful. to me that is an easy way out. they don't have to work for anything. or is that what you mean by 'comic book ending'? i don't know what you have planned for your story (other than killing off all the death eaters) but i'm a bit curious as to how you get things done. i'm glad you have harry as a key figure. he kind of has to be i guess. will there be a bit of romance? seems your new character has taken a shine to mcgonagall. hehe.
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  • From ANON - dwmerrell on June 19, 2004
    Ts, rs, rubberduck. I went back and made those corrections. I'm really enjoying your story.
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  • From ANON - rubberduck on June 15, 2004
    you're finally getting back into the writing game eh? cool. and, although it's so very early into the story there are some very promising and intriguing plot points going on. you seem to like the dark stuff though don't you? you have filch and lucius thinking about torture. and even the rangers are on hand to exact a little righteous retribution. i'm going to guess it's going to get bloody. i do have a couple of concerns though. firstly, fred and george's latest invention. it just seems to me to be a bit out of their characters to invent something so cruel and mean. also, the editor in me had to point out that you switched tenses twice in your story. most of your story is written in past te but but when you cut to filch's scene it starts off in present tense and then switches back. you do it again with voldemort. that's a big deal as it totally disrupts the flow of the story, but it's easily fixed. can't wait to read more, but bee ie i'm a softy i hope you don't hurt hermione too badly. have someone save her and love her. don't you think i'm causing her enough misery in my story? lol
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