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Reviews for Surprise?

By : DceptiveNocence
  • From luvhp on September 13, 2007
    what a cute idea for a story. Sad ending though. That's okay, they can keep trying.
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  • From ANON - lisa_d203 on December 04, 2006
    liked the story but the end sucked
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  • From ANON - Megan Consoer on November 25, 2006
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From ANON - Megan Consoer on July 29, 2006
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters? Or can you write a sequel to this story please?
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  • From ANON - Rei on October 20, 2004
    The details and description of the party (and directly after) are excellent. But it seems to me that after that the plot just took off and time flew by in a matter of sentences. The ending seemed rather rushed and not in keeping with the rest of the fic. I'm not sure what to say...perhaps cut the fic into multiple chapters and try to flesh it out more, if that's the ending you're looking to use. If you want to keep it one chapter, I'd suggest cropping out the entire final sequence.
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