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Reviews for Detention can change your life

By : Pandora
  • From ANON - Matt & Ian on December 28, 2005
    Hello, we wish to have more of the story...its too short..

    if uwish to talk to us
    myinsane_asylum@hotmail.com
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  • From punkin02 on October 27, 2005
    I loved your story. I was a little curious as to Ginny Weasley's reaction to Harry being gay...did she agree with Ron, or was she okay with it? I'm looking forward to finding out what happens after Hogwarts :)
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  • From ANON - JJ on October 10, 2005
    First, I enjoyed your story. I'd also hazard a guess that English is not your first language from the verb tense and word order errors. That makes your story truly fantastic. I'd love to know what happens next. Your use of the hexes and deep plot with Harry and Draco says that you have a lot of ideas up your sleeve. I would love to see how the trial of the Dursley's goes and how Draco outsmarts his father (I hope). Thanks.
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  • From ANON - amanda Reynolds on August 10, 2005
    i would love to fix this up it has some grammatical errors that i would like to improve with your permission. I love this story it has alot of character.
    amanda
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  • From ANON - Anon on May 26, 2005
    bo
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  • From ANON - Betty Browne on May 12, 2005
    Hello, I'm here with a review and an offer. I'm on my third chapter from a recommendation I got from a friend of mine, who loved your story. I'm enjoying a lot so far, but as I've copied+pasted onto my computer, I keep having to fix bits - with words kinda melded together
    eg: The black haired boy smiled politand and waved back while the first years watched him curiously.

    Also, I feel as if there's some bits that I can sneak in - words, and anecdotes and basically lots of extra wording to try and improve and lift your story, cos I'm really enjoying it so far but I think it can much much better, and therefore I would love to be your BETA - checking the grammar, spelling and structure of your chapters, and then adding words if deemed necessary. And if you don't like my editing, you can just change it back to how you wanted it! I would love it if you would consider my offer, and I would be ecstatic if you accepted it. Thank you v. much.

    Betty Browne (aka Serialangel on Schnoogle.com, and check out my blog - Chronicles of Madness : http://alternate-reality.blogspot.com)
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  • From ANON - Savannah on September 24, 2004
    WOW!!!! I really enjoyed your fanfic, Detention can change your life. It is my favorite fanfic of all the ones I have read. You are an exent ent writer and I hope you write more. I look forward to reading more of your work, if you have more. Congratulations on writing such a fantastic story. It was WONDERFUL!!! :)

    Savannah
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  • From ANON - Merf on September 12, 2004
    Hmm ... Well, the story line you had going was really well done, in my opinion. And, of course, I love Draco being honest and open and all that goodly stuff. ^^ But, I thought the characters were just ... Too out of character. It would've worked better, perhaps, if you made longer chapters that actually showed the characters developing from their old selves into these new personas ... Things seemed kind of rushed.
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 05, 2004
    Draco had blonde, not silver hair. Silver is grayish, blonde is whitish. And Pansy has black hair. Get it right.
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  • From ANON - ELESSAR on July 24, 2004
    that was a great revenge! im just so sorry that Draco dident get any further with his "techniques"! excelent!
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  • From ANON - elessar on July 24, 2004
    I love it! i absoulutly love it! it is a brilliant and amazingly well written story. i love the way you have written the bonding friendships between the slytherins and gryffindors! its what ive always wanted! Thank you soo much! if you ever wanted to chat with me please email me. i would love to talk! again it is great!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Jill on July 22, 2004
    wow . that story was awsome! i really really wanna know what happens in draco and harrys life after hogwarts! and i really wanna know how pansy and hermione's relationship goes and u should "explain" their encouters and relationships as well as u do harry and draco's. but make more i wanna know what happens after hogwarts. email me if u r going to and if u r email me when u post so i can read!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Zifunk on June 16, 2004
    ahh! i'm still only partway through the story, but what's driving me nuts at the moment is your use of exclamation points. they're everywhere! i finally started tuning them out and the story improved considerably--most people don't talk in exclamations all the time, cuz it tends to sound like really bad acting....:D The story is fairly interesting at this point, and there are still a lot of chapters left for good stuff to happen :D
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  • From ANON - Dante on March 24, 2004
    You are in need of a skilled . Y. Your story is entirely too long and it is extremely redundant. You use the wrong words and you skip from one tense to another indescriminately. You use homonyms with no sense of the meaning in the spelling. Your sentence structure is contrived and juvenile. You need someone to sit down and go through your work line by line correcting each sentence.

    Please get a SKILLED beta and listen to them. You need someone to totally rewrite your story. You could be a decent story teller if it weren't so painful to read.

    I sincerely hope that you are in about the 8th grade, because this is written on a middle school level. However if you are as young as your writing skills imply, you have no business at ADULT FanFiction.
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  • From ANON - Legolas on February 29, 2004
    i love you story its great. Though there are some grammer mistakes. It is a very god story and i love the way it is written and plannet. it. i know you said that the trial wouldnt be in it because it would be after the greaduation and the story ends there at the graduation. well, I was wondering if you thought about making a sequel to it. If so let me nkow i would love to know and when you get it posted to read it.

    hope to hear from yoiu soon.

    Peace
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