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Reviews for Learning to Love a Veela

By : razldazzl72
  • From Mikazuki0605 on March 04, 2023

    I read the sex part, but I didn't think that was on a very large scale. It probably still falls into the category of an appetizer for me.

     

    It was very good though.


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  • From MongooseSMB on July 09, 2008
    Hi.
    This fic is very sweet and is a nice change from the more aggressive veela fics however, you do need to keep your fics before posting just because there are quite a few simple mistakes which could be due to the fic being posted as they are there missed letters or repeats. Well done this fic is good for a light, good natured fic. The characters are all well written and reacting how I would expect from the books.
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  • From coru on May 20, 2007
    wonderful story masterfully done
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  • From ANON - alisha on December 16, 2006
    OMG I LOVVVVVVVVVVEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE YOUR STORY it's so brill carry on with the good work =] soz 4 bein a little insane by da way
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  • From ANON - stef on October 23, 2006
    hello
    i'd just like to say that while i like this story and feel the overall plot is quite good, the writing style leaves a bit to be desired. Please don't take offence from that but i just feel (especially in the first chapter) that things moved too fast and didn't quite capture the essence of the story... for instance, harry and draco were a bit out of character with how fast they went onto a first-name basis... I'm sure the rest of the story improved however, unfortunately, I will not be reading it... I suggest a bit of editing is to be done before more people can successfully enjoy this story... again, I mean no offense, I'm just trying to help for your future writing... Good ideas though
    Stef
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  • From ANON - JJ on October 09, 2005
    Just found this one in someone else's recommended list. It was great! I'm so glad you already started a sequal. Thanks.
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  • From ANON - Shini on September 15, 2005
    sorry bout that. cool story loved it.
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  • From sethian on June 18, 2005
    the pseudodragon reminds me of ''muchu'' (sp?) in Mulan .... :D
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  • From ANON - sbkar on June 04, 2005
    Hallo. I'm having a bit of a hard time reading your story, not because of your prose,
    but because of the formatting. Would you mind terribly reformatting this?
    Or, could I talk you into e-mailing me the complete story? Many thanks.
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  • From ANON - Helena on January 26, 2005
    Hi!

    I'm in the midst of reading your 'Learning to Love a Veela' and I'm loving it, but at the same time, there is some things that I think is a bit....off... I in the first chapters A/N you say you have/had no beta, I was wondering if you'd like one now?

    Love//Helena
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  • From ANON - DracosMinx on August 23, 2004
    Read the chaps posted at veelainc... sp HAPPY to find the rest of the story!
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  • From ANON - Not Inclined to State on July 02, 2004
    Okay, I shall put this simply. You have the poten for for a nice plot, but I would not know how nice it could possibly be because I cannot read this piece of junk anymore. Your dialogue is completely unrealistic and obviously mediocre; you write things that could easily be implied and are by any author who can write. The development of the story is pathetic; since when have the main characters ever called Sirius "Siri"? Try to stick to the names used in the books, it reads better.

    "You really do want me happy, and what's best for me, don't you?" Harry asked
    rhetorically, but received a nod in reply anyway. "Your not going to hurt me, I understand that now, but I can't just put aside
    everything you have done e ane and my friends our first four years here. I like how you act towards me now. Just give me some
    time to adjust. I really could learn to love you, if you are like this towards me all the time."

    This does not sound as though it belongs. It is too early into the story and Malfoy has done nothing to prove his devotion; he has only given his word. It would be better if you developed this through action, not simply saying it and making it fact early on in the story. Good stories show things not only through dialogue but experiencf thf their characters.

    He hadn't gotten much sleep for
    the night. His thoughts went back to the previous day. He couldn't believe what he'd heard about how Harry was raised. It
    angered him greatly. Those muggles would pay for their betrayal of Harry. They were trusted by the whole of the wizarding
    world to care for the beautiful..'Beautiful? Where did that come from? Oh well, he is very easy on the eyes.' young man that
    Harry was and they betrayed that trust

    This passage sounds too choppy, you've strung too many simple sentences together which honestly aren't necessary; this could have been developed later in the story or through his reactions to Harry's confessions. You don't hto sto say "It angered him greatly." Instead,le Hle Harry is revealing his past to Malfoy (and so early in the story didn't really seem appropriate; they need to get to know each other more before Harry would be confessing these things), *show* Malfoy's anger. Perhaps he grips the edge of the chair tightly and tenses in anger; perhaps his face flushes red and he becomes rigid. Malfoy is more reserved. He may be passionate about how he feels, but it seems unusual for him to be so expressive with his emotions with Harry, at least, until the plot has developed more.

    These are just a few things I've picked out. Re-read and Raluaaluate your writing style.
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  • From on October 17, 2003
    Wow... I'm almost speechless... I LOVE THIS STORY!!!
    I read it las night till chapter 13 and it was 2:30AM when I decided that it was better to sleep *g*
    Now I've finished it and it is really great and beautifull!

    Now I'm going to read the sequel but first I had to leave a review :)
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  • From shadowriter18 on July 21, 2003
    WOW It's an incredeble story. Keep Writing and I hope you can write the sequel soon.

    Shadow
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  • From ANON - cartil on July 01, 2003
    Just wanted to let you know I loved this story. Can't wait til you get around to the sequel.
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