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Reviews for No one messes with her

By : namilie
  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on November 14, 2008
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on July 01, 2008
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From ANON - Wolf on December 27, 2006
    REally confusing.@_@

    Voldemort is good?Dumbledore bad?=/

    I didn't get who was talking half the time..better luck next time.
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  • From ANON - LaBibliographe on November 08, 2006
    Storylines can be anything that an author wishes to write, so I have no basic problem with your plot. Because it is a one-shot, it couldn't have a great deal of back story, however, perhaps just a short exposition on how Hermione became a veela, added somewhere in the story, would be less confusing to the reader. One-shots,ironically, are the hardest form of story to write because each word has to count for more in painting your world for others to see.

    I do wonder, did you read it over a few times before posting it? That always helps me to find little typos and other errors that plague my first drafts. I don't know why, but it almost feels like English is a second language for you. If so, then I wish I knew another language as well as you do. But there are numerous small verb tense mistakes and other slight language errors that a good beta could help you with. You have a good imagination which is the major requirement for a writer. The grammar and punctuation can be polished. I hope if you continue with this story, you fill in a bit of the background you've alluded to in your first chapter.

    It's promising for a first effort.
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  • From ANON - DDMalfoy on November 05, 2006
    WTF? This was incredibly hard to follow and you turned Lucius into some wussy little crybaby.
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  • From ANON - Megan Consoer on November 03, 2006
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters? Or can you write a sequel to this story please?
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  • From ANON - Alyson Diaz on October 28, 2006
    Please make a sequal1
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  • From ANON - Megan Consoer on August 01, 2006
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters? Or can you write a sequel to this story please?
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  • From ANON - K.C on July 06, 2006
    I HATE YOU YOU KILLED DRACO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *CRYING* not my baby!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Megan Consoer on June 18, 2006
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From ANON - Lucas on November 20, 2005
    what is this crap potter not very good at all
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  • From InfernalParadise on November 18, 2005
    It's such a fresh, new plot that I can't actually say what I think about it. I definitely liked it, but it was very dark, so mabye it's sadistic to say I liked it. ;) Anyway, great piece of work - I'd love to see a sequel for it!! :)
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  • From ANON - Alice on November 17, 2005
    This is definitely different... but not at all bad.

    You should get a beta reader, though.
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 13, 2005
    oh gosh....
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 13, 2005
    oh gosh....
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