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Reviews for Longbottom

By : calmchick
  • From ANON - nox_lumen on May 01, 2013
    nox_lumen@hellokitty.com

    Because something is so far gone in the formatting that I would have to drop it in a word doc and add the paragraphs that should have been there in the first place in order to read it, and you have some typo's as well. If I will be doing it any way and you could use the help, it seems silly that we not connect so you can take advantage.
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  • From risatine on July 11, 2011

    Only, aside from the grammar mistakes, I have to say one thing that popped up at me was your spelling! You kept switching back and forth between Alastor and Alaster---his name is Alastor. I would recommend when writing fanfiction that you at least get the names spelt correctly--especially if they are one of your main characters. I remember reading this story a few years ago, and I have to say I'm not into it as much I was then. I blame college English classes, they've melted the creative side of my brain--all I seem to see lately is mistakes, it kind of takes away from the story. Perhaps a Beta reader would help you?

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  • From shelly56787 on December 25, 2010
    Wow... I really really liked this story... I was kinda squicked in the beginning... cuz the mental image of Moody having sex was a little disturbing... but then it just got better and better and then it ended... *Sigh* I want more... and if that never happens thats okay this was still a great read! ^_~
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  • From davidtennantismyman on July 29, 2009
    ur story is amazing
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  • From rubybrown on April 28, 2008
    If this has been beta'd, he/she didn't do a very good job. You have a lot of spelling/grammar errors.
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  • From chelleybelle on August 13, 2007
    I really enjoyed your story...i am looking forward to a new update!
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  • From chelleybelle on August 13, 2007
    Intersting so far...one note though...
    in chapter 1:
    except is for an exception to the rule
    accept is for accepting a gift...the book scene should have been "I can't accept this,".
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  • From RandH4ever on July 17, 2007
    This is really good, but, like every story, it can be improved upon. There are some grammatical errors, as well as spelling mistakes, and punctuation errors. If you want or need someone to beta for you, I'm willing to do so.
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  • From mikuplantman on May 07, 2007
    Well done with this fic! I was really impressed. It hasd been a pleasure to read. xx
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  • From savemesatan on December 13, 2006
    I would love to see the continuation of this stry. It was short, but very cool. I always thought that there was something funny about Hemoine!! XD
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  • From ANON - Fuccam on August 29, 2006
    Let me be honest everything is wrong with this story except the plot. From the grammar to the setting is screwed up. Even worse on the grammar you need to get a beta. But Sirius shouldn't be dead yet cuz they are just now starting their 5th year and if he died in some other way you should have explained that. But I think these are mistakes that can be fixed by a beta (which you need badly!!!!!!). *cough* Well other than that its actually good enough that I can ignore those things and continue reading.
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  • From ANON - Fuccant on August 29, 2006
    Its actually good enough to make me almost forget that Nev thinks he is making out with Moody and likes it. So off I go to read the rest and try to erase once more the pic of Nev and Moody and replace it with Barty Jr and Nev.
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  • From ANON - imlovingdan on August 19, 2006
    I am so mad at you right now. I loved this story and I can't believe it ended. You have to no you must write a sequel. I want Barty and Neville together so bad. Please Please write a sequel. I love this story.
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  • From ANON - Lina on August 19, 2006
    IF YOU DON'T DO A SEQUEL I WILL BE FLAMING MAD!!!! WE HAVE TO IFND OUT IF THEY ET BACK TOGETHER!!!! PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  • From ANON - Lina on August 17, 2006
    FINALLY!!!! I'VE BEEN WAITING!!!
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