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Reviews for Don't Tell Mom!

By : Timechild
  • From Tnteacups on April 19, 2017

    Wow. This was really... bad. I don't know if you were trying for intentionally bad or not, but it was just..... nearly unbearable. The first few lines seemed promising, but after that. there seemed to be a total meltdown of writing. It's like the written version of poorly acted, overproduced porn. 
    It reads as though when you wrote it, you'd never actually experienced anything you wrote about. The sex scenes were skeletal, with the bare minimum, as though reading a quickly jotted porn script. The afterword with McGonagal was completely out of character, and no way in hell a virgin is going to take an ass pounding on the first go with no warning, lube, prep, and do anything other than say 'stop, ow, no'. 
    I know it's supposed to be fantasy, but the total lack of believability, wrongness of the character depictions, poor dialogue, and worse sex imagery make it cringe-worthy.


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  • From RoxieRose666 on January 03, 2009
    Very weird....but well written
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  • From lordoberon on April 27, 2008
    Woooow. I liked it...I didn't expect the whole foursome thing...but it was hot. :D Yay for Ron/Ginny!
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  • From JaceDamian23 on November 16, 2007
    ugh that was good...the ginny and ron were hot.......i hated that snape was bad.....i did not like when harry and mione showed up. but its good
    can you please put your stories on my site? the url is in my profile
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  • From TribaPower on August 21, 2007
    lol this was crazy at first i was like u sick pervert then it was actuslly funny well well well someones hard rofl
    great story man do some more :P
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  • From Hermyone on August 18, 2007
    Wow that was really hot, very well written. Ron/Ginny is always good stuff. Hope you write more with this pair or with the four of them. Keep up the good work.
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  • From luvhp on August 16, 2007
    Haha, are you going to continue, will there be more 'episodes'???
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  • From bigtimepotterfan on August 15, 2007
    Good story. you going to continue it?
    Tammy Kaiser
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