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Reviews for Had We Never Loved So Blindly

By : mahsaff
  • From ANON - ramenhead on April 14, 2008
    Love that you started with the Burns. After listening to an all-Burns Thistle and Shamrock, I've come to appreciate him more than I ever did.

    Why make it a bit less smutty? I could have sworn it used to read, "biting, fucking, and ... more fucking." Loving is very nice, I'm sure, but fucking is a lot more fun. Plus, the first chapter seems to be about that early point in a relationship in which sex is fantastic and intimacy is scary. Smutty is good, I say! Smut is our friend!

    Wonderful things in Chapter 1:
    "In the dim light..." the beauty and detail of the description draws you in, puts you right there, and gets you emotionally involved.
    Remus's love for Sirius.
    The sex! He takes care of her first, which makes it sweet, but is dominant, which makes it hot. That's something a lot of people don't understand about bdsm: the dom/me is the one who does all the work, reading and taking care of the sub, who lets go and enjoys it like a customer getting their hair washed in a salon. And the little bit of pain -- like hot sauce with chicken: some people don't like spicy food, others love it.

    Wonderful things in Chapter 2:
    He throws the covers off; she gets cold and wraps herself up.
    She gets rid of the bruises because his "Clark Kent" side would be upset at what his wolf side did.
    The tea. Kind, considerate Remus can be a bit of a jerk. (You know why women like fellatio? It isn't because we enjoy keeping our mouths open wide for hours at a time till we're having nightmare flashbacks to our years in the orthodontist's chair. It's because, unlike the person it's attached to, little Johnny gives us instant feedback, and is never hesitant to have a conversation with us!) How appropriate, how understandable, that the tea is proof to her of her fear that she loves him and he will never love her. It's like the "There was no soap," showdown in Love in the Time of Cholera. Some trivial detail becomes the universal concrete for our enormous insecurities and sets us off.

    Wonderful things in Chapter 3:
    I love Sirius! Love how his inner dialogue is so different from Tonks's, and the fact that we hear it makes him open, distinguishing him from the secretive Remus.
    When Remus is hurt, he reverts to "bland neutrality."
    Sirius knows the difference between a second cousin and a first cousin once removed!! (Yes, I am a dweeb. I have issues with the differences between cement and concrete, anxious and eager, oblivious and unaware, between and among...perhaps it is time to seek help.)
    "She's a sweet kid..." Did I mention that I love the way you write Sirius? He must be rewarded for his friendship and perception. Surely your amazing creative powers can figure out a way to get this lovely man laid.
    Tonks's work life. Most people spend more waking time at work than anywhere else, but so many fiction writers ignore work! I like Tonks's tact with Will. Love Ann.

    Please, please keep writing! Don't keep us in suspense! I'm dying to see what happens next!

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  • From msmarvelfreak on April 01, 2008
    Hey I was so excited to see that you updated! I love how secretive your Remus is this is a fresh take on an often done romance.
    Great sex scenes. Also I enjoyed the way you write Sirius - so in character! Thanks for the making me smile too!
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  • From baseballmom69 on March 30, 2008
    I think for a fist effort, you have done really well. I will definitely be waiting to read more of this story. Good start, great job with the characterizations, and I LIKE it!! Keep up the good work.
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  • From msmarvelfreak on March 29, 2008
    oh that was really hot! YES PLEASE WRITE MORE R/T :)
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