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Reviews for The Slytherin Redemption: Now Complete

By : tambrathegreat

From ANON - Victoria Cox on January 18, 2013
I just finished reading your wonderful story, "The Slytherin Redemption", from start to finish. What an original and well-written story this is. I have never read anything that does such a good job of explaining post-war interactions between muggles and the wizarding world. The initial tale about Gregory Goyle was heartbreakingly tender and satisfying. The long story arc of Draco, beginning with the letter to Scorpius (a great literary tool to advance the story, by the way) was utterly engaging and captivated my attention from start to finish. The original characters you introduced were so well-written and carefully crafted that I felt just as involved with their lives as those of the canon characters. This is fabulous story. Thank you for writing it.
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From ANON - RowanRhyse on July 26, 2009
Oh, I have wept and laughed and sighed and smiled and cheered as I read Draco and Liz's story. You have more than fulfilled the promise of that first chapter. I should have been doing housework and cooked supper and instead I was pulled into your ficverse. I don't regret the hours spent reading at all.

I am planning on reading more of your work, but this tale will always hold a special place on my favorites list. Well done!
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From ANON - RowanRhyse on July 26, 2009
I've only read the first chapter and I just had to tell you that I am utterly gobsmacked--in a very good way. *grin*

Truly, this chapter about Gregory Goyle was NOTHING like I ever expected, and I think it was an amazing and wonderful idea. I'm a huge fan of redemption stories and I am about to dive into the rest of the chapters here. I fully expect them to be just as fantastic as this chapter.

Well done!
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From ANON - Yocum1219 on July 14, 2009
This series makes it really easy to get into Forgiveness. I like that it uses so many different characters & connects them all. I also like that it puts Slytherin's in a better light w/out making them out to be overly good.
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From Jilliane on August 19, 2008
(Chapters 26 & 27)

Oh, Bravo!!! I'm so sad to see this story end. I really just want to keep reading on and on about these people and their lives. Your writing takes these same characters, along with some additional ones, we all know from the canon books and gives them a depth and realness they never had before, all whilst keeping them in character and totally believeable. This is just a truly excellent saga that eveybody should read. I can't tell you enough how impressive this really is. You are a superb writer, don't let the lack of hits or reviews make you think you aren't. People will find the story and word will spread. In the meantime, I'll enjoy the other stories you're working on, and then greatly anticipate each new story you come up with, so please,, never stop writing!
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From SalonKitty on August 18, 2008
I am so sorry that I came to this story late and did not have the opportunity to encourage you throughout your updates.

Chap. 10 of Penance was so heartbreaking. I felt every bit of Draco's despair, and I think it was wise to give us Harry's point-of-view during the removal of the body and the last rites. The image of him cradling his former nemesis' wriggly newborn while standing in his shabby flat moved me greatly. Ginny's gentleness towards Draco and her sincere offers of support were so wonderful and needed. I like how you've portrayed her, as well. And I really love how you've exposed Harry to this side of the war that he was heretofore unaware of through Draco's story. It seems very fitting that it would be the young Malfoy to school him on the worst of the human traits.

The Epilogue was full of hope for the future, and I loved how you made Draco the liaison for the Muggleborns affected by the war. The fact that Lucius hopes to use this position to his advantage, though, was a perfect bit of characterization. Lucius still manages to thrill me with his cold, yet charming demeanor, and he was positively brilliant during his scene with Draco. I'm so eager to see how you'll make use of him as the next installment continues their story.

This is such a mature and thought-provoking piece. It's quite unusual for this site.
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From Jilliane on August 18, 2008
(Chapters 24 & 25)

To continue the lovefest.....I loved Lucius' murmured line to Padma! I really love the way you write Lucius in this story. I'm glad he was cleared and finally let out of Azkaban, and I had to laugh when he was sentenced to probation with Ian. I love his growing respect for Liz, and I really loved his words of advice to Toby. Very Malfoy. What I love best about this chapter and your Lucius are his struggles to cope with and adjust to his new world and changed circumstances. I love how he's slightly appalled at himself for being attracted to Padma, a woman his own son's age, but yet still wants her. That along with the contrast of his continued thoughts of Narcissa, despite her nastiness and vindictiveness are very touching. He loved her, he was married to her for a long time, and she hurt him, wounded him deeply, as well as rudely surprised him with the divorce, and yet he still thinks of the good times they had together. He's human, and that's what I love most about the way you write him. My favourite part was the bit when he was walking past the Shrieking Shack and thought of Severus, his only true friend and how much he wished to be able to see him again. It was the tears that had me undone. Excellent writing.
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From Jilliane on August 16, 2008
(Chapters 22 & 23)

I loved it that Harry did what he could to make a bad situation a little easier, volunteering to be the one to arrest Draco. O loved it that he said he couldn't bear it to be someone that didn't care. I liked the "ferret" and "Potty" and the "Eugene" and the "Shut it". A nice little bit of levity in a sad circumstance. I loved it the Draco still thought to pray for Hermione and her family given what he was facing, and that he had hope he would one day get back to St. Catherine's. Even though it's so sad, I loved it that Draco couldn't bear to smell or use Liz's shampoo whilst in Azkaban, that he loves and misses her so much it would drive him mad.

I loved the older students from other Houses taking up Toby's defense. I loved it that Blaise was there to comfort Toby, that he took him into his lap, that he cares so much, about Toby, and all his students, and about Pansy. I love it that he loves her so much, that he's stayed by her even in her madness.

I love Liz. I love her strength and her grit and her devotion to Draco. I love it that she feels they were meant to be.

I love poor Lucius. I love it that, evil bitch that Narcissa is, it still made him cry when he learned that she divorced him.

I love this story, and I love all the little things that go into this story. I love your writing, I love all that you put into it, and what I love most is that you make me feel like these are real people and that you make me care about them.

I just love it all.
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From SalonKitty on August 16, 2008
I just finished Ch. 7 & 8 of Penance. You do Draco a great service in your depiction, truly. I feel much like Harry, at various points of his reading. Draco provides a strong, unwavering voice in his narrative. To be honest, I very rarely get sucked into HP stories that don't feature Harry prominently in the action, so for me to have continued reading says a lot about your writing.

One thing I wanted to note was your treatment of the Death Eater rapes and how you compared them to the atrocities of real war. This is another area that is rarely dealt with in any realistic measure in fanfic, but something that I always felt was implicit in canon. Rather than serve up details for purely prurient interest, you suggest real ramifications of a war waged over purity and fascism.

She wanted to raise our child with a faith in a sacrificial blood-god who saved the world. The concept was still a little too Gryffindor for me I loved this line. Especially coming out of Draco's mouth.
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From Jilliane on August 12, 2008
(Salvation: Chapters 20 & 21)

I love Liz! I love how she was undaunted by Lucius. I like how she and Ginny are friends. Ginny's account of Harry's proposal made me smile.

Poor little Toby. I'm glad he's finally getting the father he's wished for, and I'm glad it's Draco. I'm glad he's got Professor Zabini on his side, an authority figure he can count on and talk to at Hogwarts. And honestly, I wish someone would take Rita Skeeter's poison pen and shove it up her arse. Hermione has dealt with her before, I'm glad to see she will again.

I can't believe so few people have read or reviewed these stories. That may be because of the category they have to be placed under. I feel kind of bad about it since it was me that asked you to post them on this site in the first place. Still, I'm glad you did, because these are surely the best written and most interesting stories on this site.
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From SalonKitty on August 11, 2008
Tambra, you are indeed great! I just finished Chapter 1 & 2 (Penance), and I already feel compelled to offer up my praise. The introductory set up with Goyle was a nice change of pace; we don't often get his point-of-view. It was written richly enough that I was curious enough to continue. What you've done in the following scene was amazing. You have an obvious mastery of the English language, and with the placing of a few well chosen words, you convey extensive information on the state of each character.

I have a particular predilection for dark, harrowing stories and this has usually lead me to the most twisted offerings in the HP fandom. My bent is typically towards non-con style fiction, but it's hard to find it written episodically, and written well (the genre seems almost exclusive to one-shots devoted to ficfests on lj). Interestingly enough, it is my Gryffindors who take the most abuse and torture in the stories I read, but you've reminded me that the Slytherin students were not without their trials and tribulations. Exposure to more horrors than their brave counterparts is a likely event in their training as young Death Eaters, and exploring their reactions to that kind of treatment is a worthwhile endeavor. After all, one would have to be inured to torture in order to partake in it. Draco's words in his letter are so bleak and resigned. He's had a long, hard road to travel. The juxtaposition of the wretchedness of the letter to Harry's blissful home life is not lost on this reader. I loved how you ended this chapter, too, surprising us with the reveal of Ginny as the second reader and her tearful reaction to the contents.

You know, I always imagined that an addicted Draco would find comfort in something old-fashioned and elite, like opium. I mean, his pale, wan visage, that slender, sinewy body seems made for the opium dens, being catered to by busy house-elves. But I suppose with his fortune gone, he had to hit the very bottom in a very Muggle way.

Anyway, I'm on to the next installment, but bravo on some wonderful characterization. You say it's all AU, but it feels so canon. Oh, and a HUGE thumbs-up for making Snape a virgin. I can never get over just how much fanfic depicts the Potions professor as some sex god. I always thought of him as asexual in the books, and after our glimpse into his memories of Lily, I was convinced he had remained faithful to her his whole life in the ways of the flesh.
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From Jilliane on July 30, 2008
(Chapter 14)

OMG.....this story is even better the second time around!

What a twist to have Lucius be the one accepting of Draco's son and Narcissa be the pure-blood who-won't-dirty-her-hands. I'm sorry, think what you will, but I was cheering Lucius on when he had his hands around Narcissa's neck for the way she treated poor little Scorpius. She wouldn't even touch her own grandson!

The part with Lucius in Kings Cross was a nice touch. This is Lucius' real epiphany, I think. And Tish's words about Severus.....interesting.

More please!!
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From darkxellos on July 29, 2008
Amazing. It's been a long while since I read a story so emotionally intense. An insighful look into the often forgotten post-war consequences and the long, hard road of rehab. And what the hell was Parvati thinking?
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From Jilliane on July 22, 2008
(Chapter 12)

Dammit, Draco! I'm glad to see Liz stand up for herself. I like her character, she's a survivor and feisty and won't be taken for granted.

Although I think Liz and Draco belong together, I'm glad that she accepted the date with Neville. It won't hurt Draco to sweat it a little.

Two more excellently written chapters in this awesome series. Can't wait for more.
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From ANON - Cyador on July 22, 2008
Poor Draco, and he doesn't even know that date is the Ball at Hogwarts. I bet he is thinking she'll go with him and now he will have to see her in Neville's arms.
I like that you work out your characters so well. That is rare in general and especially on this board.

And i have a weakness for Lucius Malfoy - aspecially is someone succeeds in portraying him as 'not nice'. So I really look forward to the next parts of this story and whatever else you have written in this series.
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