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Reviews for Paid In Full

By : twocanz
  • From Separ007 on February 07, 2011
    Well done, but I'm a bit disappointed Ginny didn't get her due for violating Hermione ...
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  • From AutumnKate on October 26, 2008
    I'm so happy you got the sequel done so quickly. I'm off to read Part 3.
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  • From SalonKitty on October 25, 2008
    Sorry, twocanz, that I didn't get the second part review up when I read it, but I got a little sidetracked. I thought having Colin in place of Cormac made PERFECT sense and was happy to see it. I sort of wanted to see him own up to his part in things, rather than hide behind a fake Imperius. That little snake.

    I liked the addition of the scene preceding the train ride, where Harry essentially services Cho into delirium. I appreciated her words to him, as well, as she recognized his feelings of self-loathing and deteriorated worth. It's great to see how fully she accepts their relationship, regardless of its origins. She doesn't question the tenuous threads of reason that try to latch onto her psyche, at this point, but just focuses on what they have in the now. That's quite a healthy turn-around from her previous year. It's not quite denial, and it's not quite recovery, but it works for her. Too bad Harry can't take a page from her book.

    I still have the same problems with the ending as I discussed before, but I won't enumerate them again. Harry's cry of I'm worthy now! remind too much of Wayne's World, but I can understand where you decided to resolve things so you could move on to the next story. I still think there are many facets of this new relationship between them worth exploring. Your characters still need some more dimensions, even though we spend so much time in their heads. But still a good follow-up to PFHP.
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  • From twocanz on October 19, 2008
    Thanks, Salon Kitty! You were a great help. I hope you like, too, that I changed Cormac to Colin. I felt it better to highten Hermione's situation in the final story. To show that Colin really was doing damnage because of his obession. Also, did you catch that Draco was also in Hermione's boat?
    "Dysfuctuional, disturbed duo", I LOVED that description. If I wrote another part of this storyline with Harry and Cho, I would totally have to steal that from you and entitle the story that!lol
    Hope you like the third part, too. I didn't really change anything. And thanks again for all your help!
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  • From SalonKitty on October 19, 2008
    Wow. Holy shit, you really did a major overhaul, didn't you? I'm loving all the changes you made. I feel really honored that you took some of my suggestions and made the revisions into a fantastic first half. I can hardly wait to see how you've punched up the second act.

    A few highlights for me:

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  • From SSJ04Mewtwo on October 18, 2008
    Woe, what an ending. And the drama keeps coming. This Mewtwo is off to read and review the next one.
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