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Reviews for New Lives in St. Louis

By : RAG90
  • From Mashkai30 on June 19, 2013
    Lovely story! I like it thus far and am looking forward to more. Thanks for sharing!
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  • From Mashkai30 on June 19, 2013
    Lovely story! I like it thus far and am looking forward to more. Thanks for sharing!
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  • From keraizaki on April 20, 2010
    I really like where this is going ^^ It's really hard to find a good Harry Potter/Anita Blake story! (At least one with Yoai! lol)
    And my choises for pairings are:
    Draco/Harry
    Asher/Caleb
    Severus/Remus
    And yes, I do think Severus should become a vampire like Harry ^^

    Thanks,
    ~Kera
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  • From hauntoftwilight on December 07, 2008
    Blast you! i hope you update soon. this story i so good. i look forward to reading more. please e-mail me when you next post.
    twilight_mouri@yahoo.com
    twilight
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  • From tas on November 10, 2008
    Just like to say I like your story. I love crossover fics. Hope you update soon.

    ~tas
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  • From Vitki on November 09, 2008
    First of all (I'm sorry but I'm really trying to help you), slow down there! You're skipping over some details that you could use to take this story from a C/B grade story to an A grade story. You should also think about rereading the Anita Blake series...you could use the refresher on everybody's personality. Like for instance; the conversation between Anita and Caleb. Anita is territorial about her men and ever since CS Anita views Asher as hers. Also...Anita...well, she's not really a very girly person...frankly she's supposed to SUCK at those kinds of emotional conversations. And then Jean-Claude...he's like the most practical scheming character in the Anita Blake universe! He wouldn't automatically accept Harry and Snape! And also turning EVERYONE into something...it's over doing it (although I like the Harry being a vampire with the ardeur). Which brings up another thing...ardure? Come on...look the word up somehow! Either through another fanfic or go fishing through one of the books (that's exactly what I just did).

    Anyways...I'm sorry to have ripped, and I'm looking forward to your next chapter.
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  • From Carmeleyes23 on November 09, 2008
    gees...love the chapter but still all about Caleb...sup with that?
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 09, 2008
    Harry/Draco, JC/Sev!!! XD, I agree!!! Asher/caleb lol Richard/Remus!! I vote for those pairings ^_^ LOVE THE STORY SO FAR!!! Update sooooooooon >=)
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  • From alma on November 08, 2008
    I'm still for JC/Severus and Draco/Harry
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  • From alma on November 08, 2008
    I saw some wanting Jean-claude with Harry, I want them together too, please, please.
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  • From alma on November 08, 2008
    Good start of story! I'm all for Draco/Harry and Jean-Claude/Severus with harry becoming a vampire and maybe Jean-Claude being a parental figure with Harry, being protective of him.
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  • From angelnomiko on November 08, 2008
    wow .. im glad there is no hard feeling.. and will draco take the job.. please please update soon .. i would love to read more

    angel
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  • From serenagold on November 08, 2008
    Ugh. I can't keep reading this. The opening chapter was pretty good and very interesting. I liked where you started to go with this, but overall you grabbed at too much, too fast and everyone is codependant on each other waaaaayyyy too quickly.



    1) I would never believe Anita would accept someone so quickly as she does Caleb for Asher.
    2) Everyone's way too cool about Draco being turned into a Leopard.
    3) Noone in St. Louis has ever heard of wizards, but they're all accepting of wizards once they're told about it and aren't the least bit concerned about what powers the three from London have or what potential threat this could mean for the city.
    4) Snapes discovery of Harry as his son should have been more emotional or at the very least more developed. However I let that one slide since I assumed you were going to focus the story from the Anita Blake books more perhaps so it was more of a set up. However, its only mentioned once and is never gone back into again so it leaves the reader with a rushed feeling.
    5) Harry a vampire? AND he has the arduar? C'mon. Draco's a were and now Harry's a vamp. No biggie. Case in point, it should be a very big deal. If anything you should have picked only one of them to transform and become something else. Plus, it Harry now belongs to Belle (who would never chance to go to Illinois in person, btw), there's going to be a big problem with him sticking with JeanClaude's lot.
    6) I'm sorry. I didn't even stick around to wait this long but Richard/any male character just does not work for me. The guy's way too straight and borderline homophobic for that to ever go down. I saw you mention the pairing in one of you Author's Notes and that was almost a deal breaker for me right there before proceeding to read chapter two, I think. That logic just does not compute.


    Man. I'm forming lists. :/ I'm sorry. I'm stopping now and wishing you the best of luck with your story.
    My only advice to you would be step a bit closer to your characters and your plot and bring the readers in with a more introspective look into the characters and how they think and feel. We need more emotion. We need a greater connection.

    Also, you've got some really interesting ideas that could be wonderful if you just fleshed them out a little. Slow the pace down a bit and focus on the now. The whole thing reads like a summary rather than a full story.

    Good luck!
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  • From angelnomiko on November 08, 2008
    wow that was awsome .. and i hope caleb is still pure for asher.. please please update soon .. later for now

    angel
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  • From Carmeleyes23 on November 08, 2008
    Don't stop the story there...this does semm to be a little too much Caleb and not enough Harry
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