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Reviews for Harry Potter and the Unknown Mysteries

By : WolfPup5683
  • From babed1026 on June 22, 2012
    I love the Emmet/Draco/Harry because I think Emmet is way hotter than Edward. I don't know how to get updates when you add a new chapter so please let me know when this is updated. I hate a Hermonie and Harry pairing but this is your story, maybe make her 1 of his children bearers sluts!!! lol to knock her off as a know it all. Thanks for the entertaining story its really HOT!!!;)
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  • From kitsunekiri on November 04, 2010
    Hi
    I love ur story I was curious as to where severus was in all of this?


    heres my email:ravensemaj2000@yahoo.com
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  • From johnnyd1990 on February 17, 2010
    i like. i think Harry/Draco/Emmett/Jacob would be hot
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  • From ANON - sable_silverrain on October 15, 2009
    Well, Harry in a skirt is hot. So there. Anyways, loved the chapter, and can't wait for more! So... Update soon or die, yes? LOL, j/k. But still, TRY to update soon, at least. I have to go to bed now.
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  • From ANON - sable_silverrain on October 13, 2009
    Bout time you updated! Dammit! Well, I don't have time to read it right now, lots to do, school crap, ear lavage and urine catch and all those wonderful things I have to memorize... Yuck! But anywho, I will read it when I have the time, hopefully BEFORE the weekend. I'll leave another review for you when I've read it.
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  • From ANON - sable_silverrain on September 12, 2009
    Wait, I'M on your reccomended reading?! How sweet! Thanks! And I saw that you liked Children of Atum. Did you read the latest chapter? Harry in a skirt... MMM...
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  • From SilverLion on September 05, 2009
    So, Emmett is going to be in a threesome with Draco and Harry? I thought he was with Rosalie? I think Harry/Draco/Edward would be hotter. Or maybe Harry/Draco/Jacob. Even better: Harry/Draco/Edward/Jacob. YUMMY!
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  • From Bastian on September 03, 2009
    This is shinjifukushima from LJ. Incase ya didn't know. :P

    The biggest problem I really see is a bit of switching tenses. Its not that big of a problem but I would recommend looking for a beta who is willing to go over everything for you. They really do come in handy those betas! I don't know what I would do without mine. I can beta basic stuff but I really suggest looking for someone who is a bit more adept like I did. Not only is it good for the story but she helps me when I question certain grammar situations and it is helping me better myself.

    If your unsure as to where to look, just go into my LJ and look at my user profile, My Nightmare, and see the communities I am a member of. In there is a community called hp_betas_wanted. Just fill out the form they give you and someone will get back to you on the story. Other than that I say the only other problem I didn't quite like is that you don't really space out your switches of persons. In that I mean at first its Harry then its someone else then its back to Harry without really any warning and that can be a bit confusing. A simple

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    To indicate the change is all that is needed.

    Beyond that I like the idea of the story. I love crossovers and especially with Twilight. I'm currently working on a Harry/Edward crossover myself. I think your doing a pretty good job. You have the idea which is great and the rest of it will come later. :)

    The biggest thing I can say is just keep with it. Even if you get down a bit, don't give up on it. Especially if a beta super corrects it because in the end you can use whatever knowledge you gain to make an amazing story that much better.
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  • From ANON - sable_silverrain on September 01, 2009
    BUT I KNOW THE VISION!!!! It's [censored], so HA! Aw, damn. I've been censored. LOL. Fine, you win. *sigh*
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  • From ANON - sable_silverrain on September 01, 2009
    ...So when do we get MORE?? How bout now, sound good? Sounds good to me. *waits patiently* ...

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    ...

    *starts waiting IMpatiently*
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  • From ANON - SilverLion on August 30, 2009
    HA! I love that name for the host. 'I'm Very Sorry' in Japanese. It's a kick. And Harry owns a restaurant. KEWL! I love that you made Cascada a witch. It makes things more fun. A friend of mine over at hpfandom.net (Roozette) claimed that Edward Norton and Brad Pitt were wizards in her story 'Things I'm Not Allowed to do at Hogwarts', she had Harry start a Fight Club.
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  • From ANON - SilverLion on August 30, 2009
    Chapter 2: This is unusual. I wonder how things will turn out. Is Tommy really desiring a truce? I forgot to mention in my last review, that you misspelled Grimmauld Place.
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  • From ANON - SilverLion on August 30, 2009
    Chapter 1: Your sentences tend to run on without break and you don't break the sections where you change scenery. This is a good concept, and that the Dursley's want to try to make amends with Harry is always a refreshing break from the abusive stereotype. I've seen repentant Petunia and, on occasion, Dudley, but a story where Vernon wants to make things right, so rare it's almost unheard of. I hope you can find someone to help you clean this up.
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  • From ANON - sable_silverrain on August 29, 2009
    YAY! ...Now hurry up and move on, yes??
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  • From ANON - sable_silverrain on August 28, 2009
    YAY! Took you long enough, damn it! Grr, now I have to switch my favorite to this one so I can sign-in without having to fill in my name. Okay, TTFN!
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