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Reviews for Frankly My Dear

By : Twistedsensation
  • From JillianUnleashed on June 07, 2010
    Hi Again,

    I wasn't meaning to rip it to pieces, i honestly had questions etc so I hope I didn't offend you.

    Oh no, by the duel comment, I thought Astoria's daddy or borther would surely call Zabini out. After all, if you can't have the one you want, go after the SECOND best, eh? Now that Astoria knows Draco is a no-go, Zabini would make the perfect spouse, and he'd have nothing to say about it because men who "ruin" women and don't follow-through (and perhaps survive the duel) don't get invited places either and become outcasts in their own rights. The big difference would be that men can own property and inherit whereas women ARE the property, so a fallen woman would have very little ability to support herself. Oh women's European history was such a fun class. It's all coming back to me now!

    Anyway, I have no idea why other people aren't dropping you notes. I try to review stuff that catches my eye, but this site is sorta a pain in the butt to review at but at least the word verifications are usually entertaining. for this post, my WV is "gargoyle indictments" and that really sounds like a comic book or movie title based off a comic book (sorry "Graphic novel").

    Jillian
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  • From JillianUnleashed on June 06, 2010
    Hi,

    I like your story so far. I did notice a few things though, a cravat is the piece of clothing that evolved into the neck-tie. I'm not sure what a cavart is, but I can see how it'd be easy to type the letter in the wrong order if one is tired or in a hurry.

    Also, what year is this story taking place? You state it's Victorian, but it sounds Georgian or Regency (which is sub-Georgian). I say that because of the comment about the war with the French. That really came to head in the Georgian period etc. The Victorian era focused on progress (financial, social, technology, political etc.) and most Victorian era romances focus on American money fueling English recovery. At that time perios American "steel barons" and other commerce tycoons sent their daughters abroad to acquire titles because that was just about the only thing they couldn't purchase. It was very much Old "money" (most of them were broke, so money's a joke at this point) meets new money. Think "white trash with money" moving into the highest social circles. The daughters were raised as ladies, even if they werent, but the older generation were often hard-wroking ex-blue collar people. Hardly the sort one invited to tea....

    anyway, here's a site to explain it better than me: http://lustintime (dot) blogspot (dot) com/2009/04/timeline-of-historical-eras (d0t) html

    as usual, you need to replace the (dot)s with periods and remove the spaces to make the link work.

    lastly, the red knickers comment was odd because women didn't wear anything closely associated with modern knickers at this point in time. They mostly wore cotton drawers which looked like loose shorts or pants and covered the legs down to their garters/stocking. Colored knickers were an ionvent of the 1920s.

    http://www (dot) lingeriediva (dot) com/Panties-History

    I don't mean to be so picky, sorry if this is a bother. I've read a lot of historical fiction, history texts, and of course, historical romance, so a few thigns just jumped out at me and sort-of hit me in the face with a hammar.

    I was wondering what the whole political structure was. There was no connector between ch1 and ch2. Ch1 was about draco meeting hermione and left us hanging a bit and then in chapter 2 we have zabini sort of naked and rambling about something, with a very unclear siutation going on until about half through and then it's clear why zabini is sorta naked with a woman, who has her pocketbook set on draco. That's all fine, but in both the Gerogian and Victorian eras, she'd be ruined if Zabini didn't marry her. Otherwise, she'd be a complete social out-cast. I'm not saying people didn't get it on, but they tried with all their might not to get caught. Zabini would have been in real danger of meeting someone at dawn or having to marry the tart, as he was the one that was undressed.

    Oh, where does magic stand, and Hermione's place in that? She's one of the few muggleborns that JKR focused on in her books, beyond the creevy brothers. Dean thought he was muggleborn, but turned out to be half-blooded. I guess what I was wondering is in your story, does blood status matter? Is magic the same or as real?

    Oh and I like your title, The american antebellum period (1789-1849) did take place during the georgian and victorian periods.

    So thanks ofr sharing your story with us and i'm looking forward to ch3

    Jillian
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