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Reviews for Your Body is a Wonderland

By : portercm
  • From RogueMudblood on February 22, 2012

    First, let me say that you pulled me in right from the start. The premise was fascinating, and the way you write is engrossing. I do have one small suggestion: you might consider chaptering this. I admit that when I looked at how small my scroll bar had become after loading the page, it gave me pause before starting to read. But after the first two paragraphs, I was enjoying the story thoroughly.

    There was a moment there, when you had Draco make the statement in the stands about not suddenly liking guys despite the physical change, that I thought you might be exploring Fem!Draco as a lesbian. It is certainly an interesting concept, especially with the way you've presented this scenario.

    Interesting! Draco as a healer - now that is intriguing.

    Hm. Draco knows Potter is incapable of being creepy...well, that creepy. His arrogance always was his downfall. Even if you don't end up writing Harry as a cretin, that is one statement that goes against Slytherin preconceptions in that it assumes that someone in another house is not capable of deception. I do love how you're working little bits like this in; even if it's unintentional, it's certainly riveting!

    I have to say that I find his sudden about-face in Potions a bit disconcerting. I could accept the idea that he was becoming enamored of Potter's attentions more readily if there had been some liaison with one of the Slytherin boys (Blaise perhaps) who had confronted Draco in regards to the revelation of his being female.

    Draco assuming that Granger can't tell a lie - again, very interesting that he's discarding Slytherin mistrust in favor of his own arrogance, especially given that his world has been shaken to its core with his entire identity having to be redefined. Although I did love the very comical reaction to the revelation of Potter's impetus for interest. How he must have struggled while Draco was still male. And, if he had come to accept a mate of the same gender, how much more of a struggle now that said mate has changed genders.

    Oh, good; you didn't have Harry born as a Veela. That's always been a rather large plot hole, even in AU stories. How did he survive at the Dursley's - people who think magic-wielders are born of Satan - as a non-human creature, with physical attributes that would enhance his otherworldliness? I'm so very glad that you didn't go down that road.

    The kiss reference was perfect. Absolutely perfect.

    Hm. I'm not sure how I feel about your ending. In all, I think you had a vast territory that could have been explored here. If you ever choose to do so, I'd be very interested to see just how Draco's character could develop through the stages of acceptance of the transformation, as well as Harry's emotional transition from liking a guy to liking a girl. The exploration of the inverse for Draco, who throughout your story maintains a very male mindset, would also be interesting.

    Thank you for sharing this intriguing premise. Happy writing to you!
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