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By : Araea Swiftwind
  • From hidaritoki on March 24, 2011
    I like the idea for the plot. Harry does speak well, but I enjoy it. My younger brother has always been very articulate. Some kids just mature faster.

    Harry living with the Malfoys. And, Snape getting Muggle rights to Harry. Very interesting. I am glad to see you updated. I look forward to the next chapter.
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  • From Tesgura on March 24, 2011
    I'm very much enjoying this story and Harry and Draco are very much believable. I used to work in a daycare and teach sunday school, I know children are very intelligent. I've had 3 year old's explain to me if there is no air in space we should put plants out there to make it. They're not stupid, far from it. And it's perfectly natural for someone in Draco's position to not know what he enjoys might be considered 'play' by someone else, just practice. And yes, children wine and have tantrums, but that's about the gist of what Harry had in this chapter about adoption.

    Overall, great story, great idea, and great execution.
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  • From BleedingHearts on March 24, 2011
    Ok, I understand you've been around children for a long time, and probably know more about a child's development, but Harry is an extremely articulate speaker for his age. Uncle Vernon and Petunia would have probably taught him good manners and respect (to save themselves from embarrassment or something), but I doubt even they are capable of Harry's level of vocabulary.
    Even in the four months he was with Severus, I doubt he could have picked up on all that. And he's very confident for a child with a history of neglect and abuse.
    I dont have any other suggestions, as the rest of this fic is amazing. I just don't find Harry's character believable.
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  • From bored137654 on March 24, 2011
    I love this story so far. And I agree with you, children are much smarter than most give them cred for. I am studying to become a children psychologist and I have a sister who is only 7, who formed complete and long sentences at the age of 2-3. She's considered smart for her age, sure, but children are sponges when it comes to knowledge (just look at those 3-year-olds who can speak 3 or more languages!). I see nothing abnormal in a child with Harry's intelligence, heck, I've seen smarter children than that. When I was helping out at a pre-school a few years ago, there was a 6-year-old boy who played chess on a genius' level. He tried to teach me maneuvers, but I can honestly say I found it too complicated (though I admit never to have had an interest in chess, even if I had known more of the game, I probably wouldn't have been able to keep up with him). So I don't see anything wrong with Harry here, and if so then more in the beginning about how he dared to be so open with his anger towards the family who have put him down and made him feel unloved for all his life. But hey, that's got more to do with personality than it has to do with intelligence. So keep up the good work, don't let ignorant people put you down and update soon! :)
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  • From AngelKellar on March 23, 2011
    Good idea... :) Bad execution on the part of the children. :( i'm guessing you've never had or been around children much. If you had you would know 4 and 5 year olds do not talk in complete sentences, nor with precise articulation. They, also, do not know words like amiable, toting, and the like. Also, children of that age have no idea what logic is, let alone how to use it. It's fine for them to talk that way-just make them the right age to be able to talk that way and use logic. Otherwise you really need to change the way you write about Draco and Harry because it just isn't believable and takes away from the cuteness of 4 and 5 year olds.nAlso, children that age are not going to be perfect, meaning they're going to throw tantrums, cry, and play. It's not healthy or conducive to a child's mental and physical growth not to play and go through the normal stages a child goes through, regardless of Lucius ruling his son with an iron cane. i like the idea you have for this story and enjoy the dry, sarcastic humor in it. :) i hope to read more soon! :D
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  • From ANON - Anon on March 21, 2011
    Harry's pretty eloquent in the chapter...
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  • From bloodshound on March 21, 2011
    hmmmm. He's pretty mature for his age is young Harry. I hope the Malfoy's don't do anything to dire to hhim.
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  • From dominique1 on March 21, 2011
    so sweet i do hope that they stay that way
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  • From jujukitty on March 20, 2011
    interesting start, i look forward to seeing wher eyou go with it
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  • From Jaylagal on March 20, 2011
    So far I love this story. You see a softer side of Snape and Harry has a chance to grow up in a suitable home. Can't wait to read the next chapters.
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  • From LadyLaran on March 20, 2011
    A very strong start so far. Cute scenes. I hope Snape raises Harry!
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  • From worriorbookwyrm on March 20, 2011
    This is good, please write more!
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  • From Rainbow12004 on March 20, 2011
    I love this story. I love a sweet Snape and a lovable Harry.
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  • From SpiralBreeze on March 20, 2011
    Excellent job! I really enjoyed it so far. I did wonder that if Severus was protecting Harry in school, why didn't he just keep him as a baby? I suppose that's also a really harsh everyday reminder that if things had gone differently with Lily, Harry could have been his. Anyway I can't wait to read more!
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  • From tsukinotora on March 20, 2011
    Very interesting, I think Severus is a bit OOC, but it's OK because he's with a small child after all. I'm waiting for the next chapter.
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