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Reviews for Residuum

By : SpiralBreeze
  • From Howlsword on May 18, 2015
    pretty good couple of chapters..........when are the next coming please...
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  • From ANON - jchangpa on November 27, 2011
    Ok, From chapter 1 i was almost ready to stop reading and jump to other story, from this chapter I has to give you a good review, your story start really bad at least for me, I can
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  • From SalonKitty on September 04, 2011
    Hmm, that was quick. I felt a bit toppled by the inclusion of a past tryst between Harry and Hermione. That seemed to come out of nowhere. I have a hard time believing that an event like that wouldn't have altered Harry's feelings regarding not only Hermione, but Ron and Ginny, as well. I don't see him simply thinking of it as something that happened without any consequences.

    Also, you seem to be setting up this idea of Harry being darker, yet he's so far coming off completely normal. Perhaps even too normal, considering what he'd been through. Perhaps this is intentional so that we can start to notice his slow changes, but I wonder now what you have planned with this dark piece of magic that might be infecting him. And what of the rest of the crew? Although, based on your warnings, I would venture to guess that the 'misplaced soul' will inhabit the unborn fetus that might be springing up in Hermione's womb.

    Just a grammatical note---when you are addressing someone in the middle of a sentence, it should be preceded by a comma. Think of the sentence in parts, with commas separating add-ons. So, it should follow that you would write:


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  • From SalonKitty on August 14, 2011
    Well, I really enjoyed your last little story, Spiral, so I'm in. The premise is intriguing and you've given us a nice set-up as the opener. You say it's general, but with the warnings, I'm curious to know who's got the misplaced soul. Is it Harry? Or is it Draco? And which of our female characters is going to be the recipient? Hope your first chapter is dense and filled with lots of Harry.

    Oh, and I loved this:
    Draco turned with a flounce to rival that of Professor Snape
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