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Reviews for When Bad Turns Good

By : LostDemonHeart
  • From moodysavage on June 06, 2012
    ah... well. I did go to your profile page and you did say that improvement suggestions are welcome. I actually went to check because from your writing style you seem kinda'young. Your grammar and things are just fine... but the plot was missing rather a lot of development.

    It was rather like having someone breeze through the retelling of a movie or maybe dream that they had. The problems in a story are what drive the plot and make it interesting and engaging. It shows the characters personalities and makes the reader keep reading. Your story glossed over and zipped right through the problems and made the story a 'here's the situation... they had a few problems... everyone is happy now... the end' kind of story.

    My best suggestion would be to read up a bit on how a story typically flows. Introduction of setting, characters, plot... then rising action (series of problems and resolutions leading up to major scene)... climax (usually the big scene close to the end of a story)... then falling action/resolution (wrapping up the story).

    Your story could be expanded to include all of those parts if you used your story as a guide for the story instead of the whole story. Just something to keep in mind and by all means... don't stop writing!
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