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Reviews for Harry Potter, The Secrets of Hogwarts

By : Blood_insanity
  • From ANON - Anon on April 13, 2013
    Awww soo cute but that was a very short chapter :D More please
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  • From ANON - delia cerrano on April 08, 2013
    Hermione can be such a shrew! Wacking Harry, yelling sat him...for heaven's sake she doesn't own him.
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  • From ANON - delia cerrano on April 07, 2013
    I like Blaise & Harry together. And Dumbledore is going to get what he deserves. Snape & Lucius are lovers! And Ron has shown his true colors. It's all turning out great...isn't it? Or is there a fly in the ointment?
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  • From ANON - Anon on March 26, 2013
    YAY A CURE AND LOTS OF SMUT AN LOVE ;D
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  • From ANON - delia cerrano on March 18, 2013
    Thank you for the nice fresh plot. Unusual couple also...Harry & Blaise. Always liked Blaise.
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  • From EdensPassing on March 18, 2013
    In general you're off to a good start and I enjoyed the first chapter very much.
    However,
    the transition from Severus in Dumbledore's office is a little jerky and would be better off broken off into a stand alone sentence.
    The following paragraph involving Blaise could use some more emotional language to improve, as it stands now it lacks flow.
    In paragraph 8 (involving Vernon's encounter with Harry) it seems a little contradictory.

    "Harry's eyes shot open just as a big meaty fist came swinging at him, snapping his head around fast enough that is was surprising he didn't get whiplash Harry's magic reacted and stopped the fist from connecting with his face."

    It sounds initially as though Vernon does hit Harry only for that the be negated in the following sentence, which is a little confusing. Also some punctuation appears to be missing after the word whiplash.
    Paragraph 12, the dialogue is all bunched together instead of broken up as it should be. Breaking it apart makes it easier to track who is speaking. It should be:


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  • From ANON - Anon on March 16, 2013
    hahahah love this story cant wait for the next update thanks for writing :D
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  • From ANON - Sapphire Phoenix on March 10, 2013
    Don't worry about your spelling; write your words like you are used to-we Yanks can just get used to it. I like the premise of your story. Harry/Blaise pairings are kind of rare. Keep going, you are doing great.
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  • From WolfPup5683 on March 09, 2013
    Good job, I like the story a lot, i tend to go from liking to hating dumbles a lot in fact there is no in between either i like him or i hate him, currently and with this story i hate him.
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  • From ANON - delia cerrano on March 09, 2013
    At last someone is putting Albus in his place!!! And best of all it's Harry. Blaise with Harry makes a nice change also. Naked Founders?
    I don't think I even want to think about that...or maybe I do haha.
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  • From ANON - Anon on March 08, 2013
    looks great so far all I have to say is MORE PLEASE :D
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