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Reviews for Slightly more perverted "Harry Potter" Reboot

By : Artemis1990
  • From ANON - Andrea on January 07, 2017

    4 chapters in, your story is going well so far, a bit slow but thats ok. I found the entire first chapter to be a repeat of the books, which was dissapointing.

    whats really frustrating is that you are writing in present tense.

    "Harry picks up a book and begins reading" should be "Harry picked up a book and began reading"

    Past tense is just so much easier to read.

    Im not trying to be too critical, just trying to help you improve your story telling.  :)


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  • From ANON - Kairou on November 21, 2016

    This is a great story, I hope you will start releasing more updates more often.


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  • From Edward_Dorian_Grey on October 05, 2016

    Hi, just wanted to say that I really love your story so far. I am really looking forward to seeing the next chapter. 


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  • From ANON - Pathos on September 27, 2016

    Oh this was simply fantastic to binge read. I guarrantee I'll be reading it along with each chapter if I can, even if it wasn't the thoughtless smut I originally thought, it's a really nice read honestly. And you were considering a beta not long ago I noticed, if it isn't too presumptuous, I might suggest myself for such a position if it isn't too much to ask, I feel like I'd be perfect for the job. ^w^ Either way, this is simply fantastic. Good job, and keep up the good work.


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  • From ANON - 1stHorseman on September 14, 2016

    Awesome story. Great pacing as well as original ideas such as a Hufflepuff Harry. Hope to see more soon.


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  • From Kageookami on July 29, 2016

    I love your spin on the story and can't wait to read more. I also like the slow story as far as sex goes I fill it builds the relationship. I do hope there is some in the first year though 


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  • From ANON - on July 22, 2016

    Really really good story! Please update more and soon!


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  • From ANON - Anon on April 30, 2016
    I've enjoyed the first twelve chapters and would like to read more. Are you continuing with the storyline?
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  • From ANON - Unknown on January 04, 2016
    really good story you have going on here i really want to read more so please write more :P
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  • From ANON - Anonymous52 on December 13, 2015
    Loving this story, wish there was a bit more perverted things happening, at least some masturbation or something. Also Harry should decide to follow the rule of nothing under his clothes and take off his underwear. Please update soon!
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  • From ANON - a1993 on August 17, 2015
    Well im enjoying this retelling of HP and TPS. Although my only complaint so far is that the house point gains/loses are huge (not really a big deal though)
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  • From King_Harpo69 on June 01, 2015
    So, I just binged read all the chapters. This is a great story. While you typed earlier that there will be no harem's in any of your stories but Harry might have another girl besides hermonie. I wonder who. I hope you don't try to maje Ron good because honestly I truly hate him/his character.
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  • From King_Harpo69 on June 01, 2015
    This sounds like a fantastic story. As you have stated that this story is more on plot than sex I have a question. Is this also a harem fic? It would make sense to me, not in a way related to sex. I would imagine since for the first 11 years of his life he had no love that when it comes for romantic love he would have room in his heart for a few girls. Obvious;y, at least in my pov Hermoine is the main/first girl.
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  • From Pacito on May 20, 2015
    Interesting plot. I can't deal with the constant changes in tense and the lack of plurals. There are many "He is sad so he went up the stair and goes to bed." I think that if you can find a beta, your story will be much easier to read.
    keep up the good work
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  • From ANON - doc on April 30, 2015
    1/4 of each chapter is A/N and responding to reviews makes a person not want to read ur story! send them emails and keep ur chapters about the story!
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