Click Here!

Reviews for Harry's True Self

By : yaoiboydaisuke
  • From ANON - SinfulMind on May 03, 2013
    The idea is decent and promising, however the execution of the idea... is suprisingly poor. You're rushing with things as if there was a competition of who will present the plot quicker. Your style is not very good, the chapters are chaotic, shallow and just not written very well. It is obvious that you didn't give the plot much thought, especially when it comes to details.

    Slow down, rewrite the chapters, give some authentic sounding dialogues. Don't try to cram pages and pages worth of plot into one chapter.

    In its current form, the story is bad, though the idea itself is worth exploring.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - nari-chan on May 03, 2013
    this is an amazing story please please update soon.
    i love the way you have harry in this story. he is walking a fine line between madness and almost sanity. Harry's so called "Friends" and that's stretching it in my option are how i have always imagined them to be if harry, Ron,and Hermione were real people. Harry's parents make sense to me and i am vary interested in the direction you are taking this. please if possible email me when you update it is rare for me to find a story that catches my interest and holds it me want more like yours does. so please consider it :)
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Sera21 on May 01, 2013
    Interesting story so far but i beg you, I BEG you, do not have Harry get pregnant from the rape...its been done before. In fact it has been done to death. Please don't do it.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - fan on April 30, 2013
    wow i love it please keep on with this story
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Brandi on April 21, 2013
    Wow... I hope that you update this soon this story has really caught my attention and I want to know what happens next. Does Sirius accept that Harry is his son? What about Tom Riddle, why did he do what he did? Please update soon and keep up the good work!
    Report Review

  • From jules3677 on April 13, 2013
    I always have problems with rape victims initiating a sexual action so soon after their horrific assault. Especially if the victim acts to the person they first reveal their rape to. Other than that. I like your plot of Harry being the secret son of Voldemort & Sirius. I am certainly looking forward to reading what Sirius does now that Harry has removed the memory block. Looking forward to your next chapter.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - delia cerrano on April 11, 2013
    Now why would Sirius run away? Unless he wanted to think about what it all means now & in the future. Kind of abrupt Severus & Harry? But I love those two together so who cares.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - jxadams on April 11, 2013
    Was doing okay with this until Harry kissed Snape a day after being brutally raped. I realise that Harry was in emotional turmoil after finding out who his real father is, the horrific rape & the dementors prior to that, but I cannot believe Harry would be able to attracted enough to Snape kiss him, a man the same age as his rapist. You may wish to change the time between these two actions. I understand this is fiction but people don't heal from such trauma overnight. I look forward to reading an edited version of the second chapter. Thankyou.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - heartstar on April 10, 2013
    interesting more please! thank you
    Report Review

  • From ANON - ChaosLady on April 10, 2013
    What a great start! I can't wait to see where this goes.
    Report Review

  • From dark-huntressmoony on April 09, 2013
    An interesting story, im looking forward to more
    Report Review

T.O.S. | Content Guidelines | DMCA Info | F.A.Q. | Facebook | Tumblr | Abuse | Support | Contact | Donate

Click Here!