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By : Dylan_Harper
  • From ANON - Viewer on September 20, 2015
    Hello. I like this story, it's very interesting, I just wish the chapters were longer. It sounds like you wrote the chapters, then went over each one and summarized it, leaving out a lot of detail. I enjoy reading this story, but I feel like it could be so much better. Like how the first chapter was so short, when you could have added much more, like how Hermione felt while it happened, if she were sickened, or if she struggled against his strong grip. Or you could have added how, after Draco grabbed Hermione, she yelped and asked what he was doing, and only then did he cast the silencing spell, realizing he couldn't do this is she was cursing him or yelling for help. I love the direction this story is heading in, and I hope you write more soon, but I just feel that you could make this much better. If you choose not to take my advice, that's fine with me, I will continue to read. I just think that you could draw in and hook more people if you added more to the story and made the chapters longer.Thank you for reading.

    P.S. I used a fake name and Email, sorry if you want to contact me in return. If you can, leave a note referencing me at the end of the next chapter you write. Goodby, and continue writing.
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  • From ANON - louie lyn on December 27, 2014
    Pls do continue...I know rape is bad..but I just want them to end up together..
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  • From Talented_Mrs_Lupin on March 14, 2014
    So I like this so far. Draco was terrible and he should get his ass beat. However, I'm wondering if Draco is going to change his mind when he realizes that there is a baby involved, maybe see it as his chance to be better than his father was....update soooooooon
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  • From ANON - MilissaRukia on March 12, 2014
    I like the new chapters to the story. It is a tough thing for a young girl to go through. Even being pregnant without it being a product of rape would be taxing and hard on her. I am glad that the teachers are understanding and that she now has Ginny to talk to. Looking forward to future awesome writing from you. Thank you for the entertainment. And thank you for responding to my review It was a pleasant surprise.
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  • From ANON - MilissaRukia on October 27, 2013
    This is a sad but touching story. There are many people that end up in the same situation. It would be interesting to see what would happen next if the story progressed. I know that it was a shock for her to find out that she was pregnant because of the rape but I do not know if she would be able to terminate the pregnancy after she talked to the other about it. Or if she did that she would not be able to heal her heart because to loose a child that you carry even if it was conceived by such means can tear a soul apart.
    And then Draco needs to answer for what he has done.
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  • From ANON - Anon on October 27, 2013
    If you plan to continue the story (which you should) , you should increase the length of the chapters and flesh out the storyline and characters a bit more. You've started with an awesome prompt and there are many directions in which you could carry it.
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