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By : OrdinaryMortal
  • From ANON - Nicole on October 22, 2015
    Thank you for writing and sharing.
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  • From Calixandria_420 on December 15, 2014
    I really love this story! I can hardly wait for the next chapter
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  • From ANON - ChaosLady on December 12, 2014
    Poor Draco and Narcissa! Excellent update!
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  • From ANON - staar on December 12, 2014
    wow to me Lucius in this one is more of an ass than the dark lord !!!!!!!!! hope you have it that Dubbles can't do anything to them !!!!!!!! Thanks for the update
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  • From OrdinaryMortal on December 08, 2014
    Thank you, everyone, your reviews - I get so excited when my email dings and there is a new review!
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  • From OrdinaryMortal on December 08, 2014
    Dear BAFan -thank you for these comments, including the it's/its difference, which my iPad refuses to learn! I am unbetad so sometimes these get missed!
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  • From BAFan on December 07, 2014
    Ch. 20

    Take that, Albus! That was quite a slap in the face for him. Good job, James and Lily. Cannot wait to see what comes next!
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  • From BAFan on December 07, 2014
    Ch. 15

    You can take it as read that if I were to review each chapter - which, however, AFF doesn't allow - each review would be a variation on "wonderful," "great," and the like. This truly is an incredible story.

    That said, I'm going to comment on a recurring grammatical error I've noticed. It is a common one, and that's using "it's" when it should be "its." Pronouns are exceptions to the rule of using an apostrophe to indicate a possessive; hence, "hers, his, mine, ours, yours, theirs, and its." "It's" is ONLY ever a contraction for "it is."

    I hope you don't mind this mini lecture, which is intended to be informative, not critical.
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  • From BAFan on December 07, 2014
    Ch. 8

    Wow. That was an incredible ceremony. I am more and more impressed with this fic, the more I read!
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  • From BAFan on December 07, 2014
    Ch. 5

    "The most disturbing element of the evening, as far as Mycroft was concerned, was the targeting of the victims. Sensing no magic from any of them, Severus had naturally presumed all were Muggles. Dumped in Winchester town centre overnight, however, the bodies had been found in the early hours, and preliminary testing had shown that each body had a very faint magical signature. The victims all were muggle born or abandoned Squibs. . . ."

    Ah. That makes sense. And how fitting that Mycroft should be in the DOM. A perfect fit, in fact.
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  • From BAFan on December 07, 2014
    Ch. 4

    I'm quite impressed with this story. It's well-written and believable.

    "...the crimson eyes that blazed with a hellish satisfaction as the group of Muggleborns was dragged into the room. James waved to stop the memory."

    In the previous chapter they were Muggles, not Muggleborns.


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  • From ANON - ChaosLady on December 05, 2014
    That was bittersweet. Lovely. Update soon!
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  • From ANON - staar on December 05, 2014
    wow what can I say, you had me crying with the will reading !!! was great BTW.... now I hope I don't have to wait long to see the headmasters reaction to all of this....hope someone bats him one !!!!!!!!!!!!!! thanks again and see you soon !!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Meechypoo on December 05, 2014
    While I'm glad that Lucius was forced to take veritaserum and confess all his crimes, I'm still afraid that he was sentenced to Azkaban instead of being killed. He may one day come back to do damage as his magic is blocked, not removed! I'm glad Narcissa has such good insight to protect herself and I know that Draco will grow up so much better for it. The will reading was sad because lily and James are gone, but so satisfying to see everyone stick it to Dumbledore! Too bad Alice and Frank aren't there as someone needs to help Neville!

    ~~ Meechy
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  • From Jan on December 02, 2014
    Can't wait for chapter 19 ^_^
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