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By : Desert_Sea
  • From Peahen on May 13, 2018

    Wow.....WowWowWow!   Very well written from start to finish.  I read it last night and am rereading today, which is a first for me.  Doppelus and  Severi are a wonderfully magical was to address the kinkier side.  Thank you for your creative creation ;-)


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  • From BlackCrow on September 05, 2017

    *snuffles* Aww, Severus is a sweetie. I started crying when he proposed to Hermione. The sexy bits were as usual, brilliantly written and made me all hot and bothered. (This would have been a much better ending to the books, I still haven't forgiven JKR for Deathly Hallows yet, first she kills off my favourite character, then she makes Hermione marry Ron. And don't get me started on how weird I think Harry's parents' relationship was! *shudders* Nevermind, in my head he survives and goes to work at a different magical school and falls in love with Miss Constance Hardbroom.) 


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  • From Lissa on March 21, 2017

    Er. Mer. Gah. So fucking hot. I had to cross my legs and practically attacked my husband as soon as the lights were out....might I suggest he loves your stories as well. Hahahaha! ;o)


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  • From JadedFate on January 04, 2017

    Absolutely.... Fucking..... Amazing... Wow.


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  • From Remarkable on September 13, 2016

    *Fans self* Very hot! I like how it progressed, and a good amount of internal analysis as well. I'd have loved to see others' reactions to their union, but understand for the sake of not having a very long, drawn-out fic that you needed to keep it focused. Thanks for this hot piece! 


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  • From ANON - The Wandering Angel on August 30, 2016

    Hey I know I'm late to the party. So first things first....BRAVA BRAVA BRAVA!!! Thats what I call a satisfying conclusion. And a Doppelganger potion magnificent. I was honestly expecting maybe another chapter. But boy you delivered.
    Also to answer your question if I still have an account on affn I haven't logged into it in so long I probably wouldn't know the password. If you would like to contact me try my kik and or snap chat
    Snapchat:Elenab200
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    Also I probably wouldn't want anyone reading the writing I have on the account anyway. I have done alot of growing as a writer since I last posted on the account and I haven't posted because I'm writing a novel. Its probably best if it got deleted for inactivity.

    again great fanfic. look forward to reading it again and again


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  • From ANON - on August 01, 2016

    all i can say is SO HOT !!!!!!!!!!!!!!


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  • From ANON - on July 30, 2016

    i was scared she was going to leave him at the end of this story but she didnt leave him at all in fact the opossite !!! THANK YOUUUUU FOR A BEYOND BRILLIANT ROMANTIC HAPPY ENDING !!!!!!!!!!!!!! 


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  • From ANON - on July 30, 2016

    “So who is this ‘representative’? Not Doppelus again?” She frowned.

    “He’ll enjoy it. An opportunity to show off to the latest batch of Leavers. He might even get his leg over.”

    “No he bloody well won’t!” Hermione turned in his arms. “I won’t have Doppelus fucking anyone else. Do you understand me?”

    He delighted at the ferocity of her conviction.

    “You might need to make sure he has another . . . option.”

    She grabbed him by the front of his coat, jerking him down toward her. “Tell him to come and see me when he gets back,” she muttered against his cheek.  

    He inhaled rapidly. Fuck, he wanted to ravage her. But there was something else he needed to do first.

    “I believe that you will actually be otherwise indisposed.” He uttered the words as he turned to nip at her chin. “I have . . . plans for you.”

    if someone is fucking severus double (apart from hermione and even then if anyone is fucking severus) then the real Severus will feel it and thats mean the real severus is fucking someone else too (it would be like the real severus cheating on hermione) so ofcourse severus double shouldnt go to the party alone and fuck others !!! DUH !!!! 

     

    Chapter 4 - Whiskey Tango Foxtrot He watched as her tears fell. He wasn’t concerned. He understood how she felt. He wasn’t far off the same. His cock was a throbbing column of ecstasy and the fact that he could feel threads of sensation from his double meant that there was nothing left now than to release himself into her, to simultaneously coat her insides with his seed—his final mark.   

     

     

    Chapter 5 – Tango-ing off

     

    Exactly one year later . . .

     

    “I’ve sent a representative,” he mumbled against her skin before sliding the tip of his tongue down the smooth curve between her neck and her shoulder.

    “Severus,” she breathed, trying to sound exasperated but only managing to sound needy—which she always was.

    He snuffled against her, amused at her unsuccessful attempts to admonish him. He enjoyed her bossiness. It made him want to fuck her. In fact, just about everything she did made him want to fuck her.

    “So who is this ‘representative’? Not Doppelus again?” She frowned.

    “He’ll enjoy it. An opportunity to show off to the latest batch of Leavers. He might even get his leg over.”

    “No he bloody well won’t!” Hermione turned in his arms. “I won’t have Doppelus fucking anyone else. Do you understand me?”

    He delighted at the ferocity of her conviction.

    “You might need to make sure he has another . . . option.”

    She grabbed him by the front of his coat, jerking him down toward her. “Tell him to come and see me when he gets back,” she muttered against his cheek.  

    He inhaled rapidly. Fuck, he wanted to ravage her. But there was something else he needed to do first.

    “I believe that you will actually be otherwise indisposed.” He uttered the words as he turned to nip at her chin. “I have . . . plans for you.”

    Her heart skipped a beat. His plans were always exotic—always thrilling.

    “And what do you want with me?” She nuzzled against him before drawing his bottom lip into her mouth and sucking on it.

    He waited till she’d released him before dipping into his pocket and pulling out a glass bottle.

    “A surprise.”

    She took the cool receptacle from his fingers and held it to the light.

    “It would appear to be another Doppelgänger potion,” she stated, searching his face for affirmation.

    “No.”

    She frowned. It was rare that she was wrong with such things, especially after spending a year looking over his shoulder learning advanced brewing techniques.

    “A more accurate description would be a Doppelgäng-banger potion.”

    Her eyes suddenly blazed.

    “Does that mean . . . multiple Severuses? As many as I like?”

    “I believe the correct term is, ‘Severi’. But, yes.”

    A matching glint danced in his black eyes.

    “You are fucking brilliant!” she gushed before crushing her lips against his.

    He held up a hand to indicate that he hadn’t finished.

    Reluctantly she released him from her lip-lock.

    “There is one final item.”

    Dipping into his pocket, he pulled out a small black box. He wished he’d done it earlier—before his cock had turned to granite and started distorting his trousers in such an uncomfortable manner that he was going to have difficulty kneeling. Still, he was rarely without some degree of swelling in her vicinity. He found her as delectable as the day he had mercifully summoned the courage to ask her to dance. Now she was an exceptional dance partner. And an even more exceptional partner in love. He was taking another risk. But she hadn’t hurt him yet. Every single one had paid off and he dearly hoped this one would too.

    Wincing as he finally knelt, levering his cock to a slightly more acceptable position with his free hand, he flipped opened the box to reveal a black opal ring.

    “Hermione.” He looked up to see unshed tears glinting in his eyes; her fingers were laced across her mouth as if she didn’t trust herself to speak.

    Reaching up, he grasped her hand and brought it down, holding it firmly to quell the tremble.

    “Hermione. I love you with all my heart. I adore you. Will you allow me to give myself to you with this ring? And in return will you give yourself to me? Will you stay with me forever?”

    She sniffed loudly as the tears began to fall. “You . . . you want to marry me?”

    “I want you to be with me. You may choose the manner of our commitment.”

    His face was so earnest, she could hardly believe that he would question her response.

    “Of course I will,” she squeezed his hand. “There is no other person I would rather spend my life with. You are the most kind, loving, honest, intelligent, romantic, fuckable man I have ever met. I want you to be mine. And I want to be yours. That’s all the commitment I need.”

    His fingers were no longer steady, trembling as badly as hers with adrenaline and relief. With some difficulty, he slid the ring onto her finger. It went perfectly with the necklace he’d bought for their six month anniversary, and perfectly with her elegant fingers which now slipped into his hair and pulled him lovingly against her belly.

    “I need to fuck you now,” she murmured in a small voice.

    There came a sudden knock at the door.

    She groaned in exasperation. “For Merlin’s sake, who’s that?”

    Severus rose to his feet. “I believe someone is keen on joining us.”

    “Tell him he’s going to have to wait,” she said. “I’m having you first.”

    “And what about the rest of them?”

    Her eyebrows shot up as realisation dawned on her.

    “Tell them to get ready for a long night,” she growled. “My appetite for Severi is, and always will be, insatiable.”

     

     

     


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  • From OracleObscured on July 29, 2016

    This was a lovely ending. You tied up the emotional loose ends and wound up making it something very sweet. I especially love the way you used the dick-sucking scenes to convey a sense of acceptance (which you also did in ITH), but you also used it as a launch pad for his loss of control. Physical release to instigate the emotional release.
    And, mmmmm, perhaps I need to procure a panther. I could do with some supple muscle between my thighs.
    Fav parts:
    The whole opening dream scene

    (collarbone is one word)

    "snaking it under the lower curve of his bottom lip, scooping it between her teeth and tugging gently. He didn’t try to stop her, his lips loose and accommodating"--I dig the description. Hot.

    "enjoying having to chase his cock as it slid over his pelvis."--There aren't nearly enough cock chases in stories. I adored this.

    deliquescent--Mmmmmm, word notebook.

    ("Severus, you know I’m coming back don’t you?”-- Comma after back.)

    I love how Snape is getting out of social engagements with his doppelgänger. 

    "Doppelgäng-banger potion"--Hahahahaha!

    I like their continued used of the Severi. I could do with a Severi Sandwich.

    I also noticed this contained your first proposal scene between these two. I think I'm partial to this one because I like black opals. Very sweet and funny.

    I somehow screwed up my C&P again and lost another fav, so I'm one short. Maybe I'll find it next time I read this. I feel like I should say more about how much I liked this story, but I'm short on time and can't do it justice. (Or maybe my brain is melted from rewriting.) As always, I look forward to whatever you come up with next, and I'm sure I'll return to this for inspiration in the coming months. Until next time <3


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  • From HarryGinny4eva on July 29, 2016

    Doppelgäng-banger potion?! Multiple Severuses with no other urge than to pleasure you?! O. M. G.!! That was a hot, lovely, hot, loving, hot, funny, delicious, oh, did I say, hot?  And, yes, VERY yummy!  Thank you for every word!


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  • From ANON - on July 28, 2016

    Question: this is confusing he fucked other students (i mean apart from Hermione) and used the oil on other students he fucked (i mean apart from Hermione) or he gave it to students to use on themselfs or on other students after they fucked other students??  

    Quote: Taking a deep breath, he reached into one of the desk drawers, retrieving the bottle of oil that he used as the base for certain potions, to season the chopping boards and, as it turned out, to rub into the rump of certain students that happened to drop by and were keen for an all-night fuck-a-thon.


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  • From ANON - on July 28, 2016

    SHOULDNT THEY BE USING CONTRACEPTION  SO HE DOESNT GET HER PREGNANT?? UNLESS THATS WHAT HE WANTS TO HAPPEN WITH HER !!! ?? 


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  • From ANON - on July 28, 2016

    i thought they were going to have sex :-( 


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  • From ANON - on July 28, 2016

    whwre is everyone else at this point when they are doing the tango and its getting sexual?? 


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