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Reviews for Come Out Of Your Shell

By : SSprincess
  • From ANON - Unknown on January 04, 2005
    Awwww... Poor Hermione... Please update
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  • From ANON - Fiery Slut on July 18, 2003
    Your plot is gripping so please write MORE. This is pretty well written except for some wrong spelling so hope you
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  • From ANON - Fiery Slut on July 17, 2003
    Your plot is gripping so please write MORE. This is pretty well written except for some wrong spelling so hope you
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  • From ANON - Theladyfeylene on July 12, 2003
    Okay, here we go. The story concept is good. The story itself needs a bit of polishing. I'd reccomend getting a beta to look it over in depth. The things that jumped out at me were some minor grammer mistakes (common misuse of interjections and connection words) and characterisaztion. *Generally* the characterization is in the right ballpark, you just need to tweak things a little bit, mainly in the dialogue. The dialogue reads ratherppilppily, and is disjointed at points, and word choice sometimes seems rushed. But overall, you have a good working idea here.

    I'd be happy to take an in dpeth look over and offer specific suggestions, if you'd like. :-)
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