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So, where\'s the rest of the story?

I an currently writing my first story also. I find it vary useful if I want to writhe a long chapter to storyboard it. This helps me develop a good ovl pal pattern for the development of the story. I am more of a visual person so this helps me a lot. This explains it pity well.
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keep writing it sounds interesting

It\'s interesting. It also has alot of potential. Update soon and we\'ll see how it goes!

constructive criticism- cool, lots of good dark ideas ... Slower!!!! longer chapter, take time to explain things, add more drawn detadetail, build up the plot instead of throwing it out there in a paragraph.

be sure you have most of your story planned out because *from experience* it\'s hard to write an entire story pov.

you also have a few spelling mistakes

might want to rethink the title

but very cool i look foreward to the story