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So far so good, update soon please!

It\'s an interesting idea so far, although the execution is a bit shaky. If you *showed* us what is going on a bit more than *telling* us, and worked out the background story in more smoothly at the beginning, it might flow a lot better. You could have Hermione think about what happened, or give her a nightmare, or just something that does look more natural. And having ANs *in* the text is pretty distracting...
Also, why would a handful of the most powerful Dark wizards run around with *guns*? Even if they were hunting tor the fun of it, I couldn\'t see them use Muggle contraptions... The shame! :)
I have no particular preference to who will \'deal\' with Hermione, but I\'d like to see some more background to the plot :).

I really like this story, I like where it is going. I hope you will continue this and I shall give you my opinions.

1. Snape should \'check\' Hermione.
2. I think she should be with Severus and Lucius Malfoy, if not, only Severus.

I hope this helps you and I look forward to the next update.

I really like it so far, and I can\'t wait to wha what happens next. Definitely have Severus \'check\' her, and for an ending pair, would Severus/Hermione/Lucius just be too messed up? It would also be really interesting to see their reactions to Hermione doing basic wandless magic-nothing that would let her escape, of course!

Wondering whats up with Snape? Still reading , still enjoying. Update soon.

As I said before I really do love this story, though the chapters are a bit short. *does happy dance* Umm..Yea, so I can\'t want until you update again and I will be sitting over here on my arse wag! Kg! Keep up the *great* work!!!

-Riley-

Great idea. Looking forward to reading more. And I\'m all for Severus/Hermione/Lucius or just Severus.

please update again.. i\'d like to see where you are going with this story..

I\'m gues tha that this is your first fanfiction. Or at least your first R/NC-17 rated one. Not to worry though. We all must startewheewhere. Other than that, yes, I think you may have an *actual* plot. ^_^

As far as the pairing goes, please do not let this be yet another Severus/Hermione story. There\'s only about a billion on this site alone as it is. I\'d rather see her with Draco, or even Lucius, to Severus. Maybe that\'s one on the reasons I really don\'t like it when authors ask the readers what the pairing should be. It\'s just so *predictable*. I could tell without looking at the reviews that they would nominate Severus. So unless you really want it to be a Severus/Hermione, I would go with the pairing that *you* want. Not only will it probably be more original, but less predicatable.

Looking forward to the next chapter...

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