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March 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Wow. Chapter 5, wow.
He could really mess her up. She is so vunerable tha that he could easily destroy her. I don\'t think that is his goal, but he will have to tread lightly.
Cheers.
He could really mess her up. She is so vunerable tha that he could easily destroy her. I don\'t think that is his goal, but he will have to tread lightly.
Cheers.
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March 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
ooooo! cliffhanger! very good, i\'m hooked. write soon, wriite often. aloha, mele
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March 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for the frequent updates! I like the development here - not too slow, not too fast. Looking forward to the next chapter.
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March 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Dum da dum! A cliffhanger!!! No fair! Hopefully, you can update soon. This is getting good. I just wish that the chapters were longer. Purely for my own selfish reasons. I am really looking forward to finding out what happens next, and I think that this story is unique. Who\'da thought that Snape knew hypnosis? Creative!
The only thing that bothered me was that in chapter 1 (I think) when Dumbledore was explaining to her what needed to be done, and Snape was watching from the threshold, you put that SHE had once taught. Shouldn\'t it be HE? irstirst I thought that you were talking about McGonnagal watching, but as I read on, it was definately Snape. I got confused there. That was my only nitpick. Everything else was gr (E (Even your punctuation! Which seems to be a big problem for fanfic authors.)
Happy Day!
The only thing that bothered me was that in chapter 1 (I think) when Dumbledore was explaining to her what needed to be done, and Snape was watching from the threshold, you put that SHE had once taught. Shouldn\'t it be HE? irstirst I thought that you were talking about McGonnagal watching, but as I read on, it was definately Snape. I got confused there. That was my only nitpick. Everything else was gr (E (Even your punctuation! Which seems to be a big problem for fanfic authors.)
Happy Day!
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March 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
really good so far! didn\'t expect that at the end of ch3!!
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March 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I love your story so far, Please continue it? I hate to leave a very good story hanging.
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March 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I reviewed over at LordandLadySnape.net but I wanted tst mst my comment here too. :)
This story is really amazing so far. I refuse to believe it\'s your first fanfic. You\'ve already shocked me with the \"you\" comment at the end of the last chapter, and it\'s rare to find a fic that shocks me! Good job :)
This story is really amazing so far. I refuse to believe it\'s your first fanfic. You\'ve already shocked me with the \"you\" comment at the end of the last chapter, and it\'s rare to find a fic that shocks me! Good job :)
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March 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
definitely intriguing! I really like how it\'s developing so far. And I wonder what happens in the next chapter... hmm...
And beside that I have to say that the thought of Snape owning a samovar was so ridiculous that when I imagined the dark, grim and foreboding Potions master drinking tea with a samovar on his table, I was on the floor laughing=)))
Continue the story-we\'ll love it!
And beside that I have to say that the thought of Snape owning a samovar was so ridiculous that when I imagined the dark, grim and foreboding Potions master drinking tea with a samovar on his table, I was on the floor laughing=)))
Continue the story-we\'ll love it!
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March 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
AHHH i can\'t believe you don\'t have any
reviews. This is great. I really enjoy it
I am glad chapter 3 is up. I am off to
read it now.
Thank you for the wonderful story.
Keep going please.
Vicki
reviews. This is great. I really enjoy it
I am glad chapter 3 is up. I am off to
read it now.
Thank you for the wonderful story.
Keep going please.
Vicki
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March 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Great start so far! Definitely looking forward to seeing where it goes. Keep up the good work!