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Well... It was odd ! I do not like so much the idea of Herm being rapped but if the next chapter Hermione \'s becoming more willing so yes, i want read the next chapters !

Wow! this story is great. i love it so far. whats gonna happen with Umbridge? i hope she gets caught in her own game. that would be hilarious. please please please finish. it is addictive....

Maybe you could have Hermione pregnant??? (With Snape\'s kid or something) and then you just go from there. If you need a beta reader, e-mail me!
katy@rjgross.com!

Love the story and I can\'t wait to seee! Ce!

You need a beta or something use use your spelling and grammar are terrible.

You need a beta or something because your spelling and grammar are terrible.

That was weird. Ironically, you do stream-of-consciousness well, and for once develop the emotional trauma of rape rather than the physical. But your story could use a lot of improvement. First off, where are you going with this? Second, segment your text into nice easy-on-the-eyes paragraphs. Third, cut out all of the excess. Fourth, edit spelling and grammar more scrupulously. Fifth, I\'m rather fond of Snape--what have you done to him?! Why has he done such a horrible, torturous, despicable, painful, wretched, terrible, traumatic, disfiguring thing? Sixth, where are you going with this? You have the potential to be a much better writer, but you must put more effort into your work than you have here.

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Great job on this one. You personify Harry, Ron, and Hermione perfectly. I can actually hear the characters say what you write, that means you have great skill.

hi
great idear when will the next chapter be up?
can you tell me?