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for Beg for me

by PartyInMyPants

person Angie30
schedule December 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*Fans face* That was really hot, I just found this story today and I'm glad I did. I've been in a mood so this perked me right up. :) Please continue.
person Anon
schedule December 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
My only problem with this fic are the spelling and grammar errors. Instead of "knew" and "know," you had a tendency to use "new" and "no" or "now."

Other than that, I think this was a very interesting fic. Lucius and Severus were slightly OOC, but I think we, as fanfiction authors, always need to take a character and alter their personality even in the slightest to make them fit our needs (or Hermione's, in this case).
person Yuki Meloy
schedule December 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
And for wahtever reason, AFF didn't log me in as my penname though I had logged in... so yeah, just so you know I'm not some random critic, I'm the above "anon" poster. :)
person candyguru
schedule December 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Its very good! Although, I've never had a guys cum tastes like milk and honey ^_~
schedule December 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
MORE....Pleaaseeee More!!!!
lol
Nice,well not nice,but good, story
schedule December 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow. lol. good story. As for the outraged person? Don't let it bug you. That's what disclaimers are for and you appropriately put a disclaimer in, so yeah, it's their fault for reading on.

Anyway......

ONLY 10 points from Gryffindor for inappropriate behavior? lol. He's being pretty lenient! lol. Mmmmmmm...... A LM/SS/HG pairing. My FAVORITE!!!!!!
person serpentia
schedule November 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really enjoyed this story and hope u up-date it
person DIW14
schedule January 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hi i can\'t wait for more this is pretty erotic though you could use better w/w.....
person ray
schedule December 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
PPPPPPPLLLLLLLLLLEEEEAAAASSSSSSSSSSEEEEEE WRITE MORE!!!!
I HOPE THAT WASN\'T THE END...

PLEASE E-MAIL ME AT PIPER112692@AOL.COM AND TELL ME IF YOUR ARE GOING TTO CONTINUE THIS...
person Sinister Zen
schedule December 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Wow. That was really very good. You have a great style and I look forward to (hopefully) a second chapter! And to those who left bad reviews, two words : artistic license.
-SZ

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