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September 22, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Oh my...WHAT in the world happened to Harry?! What\'s Snape going to do when he gets there? Is Drgoingoing to follow his Shin traditions. Is Harry going to wake up married ;) I guess I\'ll have to see when you post the next chapter! Please ge out out soon!
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September 19, 2003 at 12:00 AM
That... Rocked. No seriously, that is the only way I can think to describe it. I\'ve read so many h/d fics and I think this one has become my new favorite. I\'ve been up for hours reading it, probably should have been to bed a long ass time ago but I just couldn\'t stop. Please update soon... I am very impatient and I *need* to find out what happens next.
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September 19, 2003 at 12:00 AM
you are such a tease......I want some D/H!!! Tease, Tease, Tease......continue though......you better.......
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September 9, 2003 at 12:00 AM
C\'mon Give us just a bit more. Even a few sentences would be fine. *pleads cutely* PLEASEEEEEE!!!!! Just a bit.
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September 8, 2003 at 12:00 AM
hey babychan! i love your story as you already know and i was just wondering why you haven\'t updated? i really want to read more of your story!! it\'s awesome!!!!!!!!! i\'ve never been more hooked on a story!!!!!!!
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August 12, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I like your story and can\'t wait to read what happens next. Hope you update soon.
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August 1, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Hi! Mm... Really enjoyed your fic! Many valid points, lovely characterisation of the Slytherin House and politics. *grins* And I\'m fascinated by the interesting three-way marriage between the Malfoys and Snape. Like your background details too, especially the Veela heritage. Do you have a website or any update feature, coz it\'s a bit of a hassle to check adultfanfiction.net for updates, especially since HP turns out so many fics...
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July 22, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Page 12: Chapter 11.
Hmm, you would think being 150 would bring some wisdom wouldn\'t it? He still has adge dge against Slytherin? Like you said, it\'s just that that makes them all the darker.
Ahh well there is a reason why he has a grudge!
It\'s a self-replicating cycle, the so-called righteous - Gryffs - consider Syths evil, to survive Slyths become evil, Slyths viciously attack the Gryffs causing the Gryffs to hate them & when Gryffs get into power they try to beat down the one they see as evil which are the Slyths!
To put it simply, yes, the Gryffs treat the Slyths unfairly but the Slyths are just as much to blame for living up to the bad e eve everyone sees them by & being cruel obnoxious prats.
The question is, what did Severus do to the Marauders to make them hate him? There are some Slyths who don\'t get noticed because they are not the vocal ones therefore what did Sev do to get noticed by the Marauders? If he didn\'t do anng tng then someone else may have been their prime target. Even in OotP (which I aknowledge wasn\'t out when this chapter was written) it implied that James & Sirius\' cruelty to Snape was not one sided. The coversation Harry had later with Sirius & Remus implied that Snape served up his fair share of retaliation.
The big question is who fired the first shot?
In Harry & Draco\'s case it was Draco in the wrong because of his pureblood bigotry, did Snape make some insult thatght ght the Marauder\'s anger? Or was is the Marauders being bullies? (Yes, I can accept they could be bullies)
Ah, here\'s the truth, again the Slyths were being heartless, bigoted, obnoxious & cruel.
So even Gryffindors can subscribe to the pureblood bigotry.
You have to respect that James did not want his child\'s life to be dictated, the whole plan for James\' marraige & the prospective marraige of his child was completely unfeeling of how James may feel about it. No wonder he rebelled.
And I bet the reason why James was so offended by who his wouldbe daughter would marry was because the wouldbe father of her wouldbe husband was someone who was one of the Slytherins who was viciously cruel to James. Again Slytherin cruelty works against them.
So the purebloods didn\'t care about James\' feelings so it was left to Albus to grant James his wish.
Can anyone see how all this pureblood pride has so ruined Wizarding society? Slyths are pureblood so they are cruel to non-purebloods. Gryffs are kind to non-purebloods so the Slyths despise them & are cruel to them. Society sees this cruelty & sees it as proof of the old \'Slyth = Evil\' prejudice. Slyths are forced to BE evil because of this prejudice. Both sides become entrenched in their respective stancesthe the pureblood issue & the whole mess becomes unstoppably self-replicating.
So two boys who hate each other are bound to each other. Can anyone say \"Eep\"?
I have never believed Gryffindor was all-perfect. I have read plenty of bigoted!Gryffindor fics (I jhavehave a problem here with this fic because Draco appears so irredeemably cruel & obnoxious. As you may be able to see with my rants I do not say that Gryffindor is totally innocent, I just say that the pattern that demonized Slytherin is partly their fault too.)
You know there is nothingcanocanon to say Harry is decendant of Godric.
Godric himself suported muggleborns & somehow I doubt that the Gryffindor line is totally free of muggleborn blood. I mean Hermione is pretty powerful. somewhere in history other muggleborns would have appeared that were powerful & it would not harm a power conious family to allow them to marry into the line. In fact it would be wise for reasons of inbreg. Og. Oh you can say pureblood line breed with non-humans to prevent inbreeding but by this chapter alone even the Malfoy line has alot of incest & what\'s more I would hardly say the Malfoy family has much claim to the tag \"humanity\" anymore (not that r imr impressive demon bloodline is something to be sneezed at).
I\'m not saying Gryffindors couldn\'t have just as much pureblood pride but marrying muggleborns is not neccesarily a bad thing for the family line.
Not that you\'d ba able to convince bigoted pro-purebloods of that *shrugs*.
So Albus\' family does not have a clean slate, the effect of the Slytherin cruelty still had it\'s impact.
I am staying with this fic because it is rather fun to write my critical examinations of it\'s content.
Please don\'t think I absolutely hate it just because I\'m being critical, I acctually do like it, partly because of the mental exercise it\'s giving me!
Hmm, you would think being 150 would bring some wisdom wouldn\'t it? He still has adge dge against Slytherin? Like you said, it\'s just that that makes them all the darker.
Ahh well there is a reason why he has a grudge!
It\'s a self-replicating cycle, the so-called righteous - Gryffs - consider Syths evil, to survive Slyths become evil, Slyths viciously attack the Gryffs causing the Gryffs to hate them & when Gryffs get into power they try to beat down the one they see as evil which are the Slyths!
To put it simply, yes, the Gryffs treat the Slyths unfairly but the Slyths are just as much to blame for living up to the bad e eve everyone sees them by & being cruel obnoxious prats.
The question is, what did Severus do to the Marauders to make them hate him? There are some Slyths who don\'t get noticed because they are not the vocal ones therefore what did Sev do to get noticed by the Marauders? If he didn\'t do anng tng then someone else may have been their prime target. Even in OotP (which I aknowledge wasn\'t out when this chapter was written) it implied that James & Sirius\' cruelty to Snape was not one sided. The coversation Harry had later with Sirius & Remus implied that Snape served up his fair share of retaliation.
The big question is who fired the first shot?
In Harry & Draco\'s case it was Draco in the wrong because of his pureblood bigotry, did Snape make some insult thatght ght the Marauder\'s anger? Or was is the Marauders being bullies? (Yes, I can accept they could be bullies)
Ah, here\'s the truth, again the Slyths were being heartless, bigoted, obnoxious & cruel.
So even Gryffindors can subscribe to the pureblood bigotry.
You have to respect that James did not want his child\'s life to be dictated, the whole plan for James\' marraige & the prospective marraige of his child was completely unfeeling of how James may feel about it. No wonder he rebelled.
And I bet the reason why James was so offended by who his wouldbe daughter would marry was because the wouldbe father of her wouldbe husband was someone who was one of the Slytherins who was viciously cruel to James. Again Slytherin cruelty works against them.
So the purebloods didn\'t care about James\' feelings so it was left to Albus to grant James his wish.
Can anyone see how all this pureblood pride has so ruined Wizarding society? Slyths are pureblood so they are cruel to non-purebloods. Gryffs are kind to non-purebloods so the Slyths despise them & are cruel to them. Society sees this cruelty & sees it as proof of the old \'Slyth = Evil\' prejudice. Slyths are forced to BE evil because of this prejudice. Both sides become entrenched in their respective stancesthe the pureblood issue & the whole mess becomes unstoppably self-replicating.
So two boys who hate each other are bound to each other. Can anyone say \"Eep\"?
I have never believed Gryffindor was all-perfect. I have read plenty of bigoted!Gryffindor fics (I jhavehave a problem here with this fic because Draco appears so irredeemably cruel & obnoxious. As you may be able to see with my rants I do not say that Gryffindor is totally innocent, I just say that the pattern that demonized Slytherin is partly their fault too.)
You know there is nothingcanocanon to say Harry is decendant of Godric.
Godric himself suported muggleborns & somehow I doubt that the Gryffindor line is totally free of muggleborn blood. I mean Hermione is pretty powerful. somewhere in history other muggleborns would have appeared that were powerful & it would not harm a power conious family to allow them to marry into the line. In fact it would be wise for reasons of inbreg. Og. Oh you can say pureblood line breed with non-humans to prevent inbreeding but by this chapter alone even the Malfoy line has alot of incest & what\'s more I would hardly say the Malfoy family has much claim to the tag \"humanity\" anymore (not that r imr impressive demon bloodline is something to be sneezed at).
I\'m not saying Gryffindors couldn\'t have just as much pureblood pride but marrying muggleborns is not neccesarily a bad thing for the family line.
Not that you\'d ba able to convince bigoted pro-purebloods of that *shrugs*.
So Albus\' family does not have a clean slate, the effect of the Slytherin cruelty still had it\'s impact.
I am staying with this fic because it is rather fun to write my critical examinations of it\'s content.
Please don\'t think I absolutely hate it just because I\'m being critical, I acctually do like it, partly because of the mental exercise it\'s giving me!
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July 22, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Page 13: Chapter 12
Sev has a point, Draco did wrong stealing Harry\'s wand & his reason for saving Ginny is rather -cen-centred.
Yes, Draco wasn\'t being very careful, he KNOWS there\'s an anti-Slyth prejudice but he uses forbidden spells & is uncaring of anyone outside Slytherin *shakes head* a bit silly!
*Sighs over Draco\'s reaction about healing muggleborns* I\'m not even going to say it.
Oh so Lucius is wiseugh ugh to see the use of a book for muggleborns but Draco can\'t? Just shows Lucius has wisdom Draco doesn\'t!
Okay, something that isn\'t critical commentary about racism & udicudice, \'shotty\'? I think the word you wanted was \'shoddy\'. another reviewer said you needed a beta, you really do. I\'d offer but I work best if it is the first time I\'ve read something, second readings I tend to skim & I\'d miss details.
*Shakes head at the Twins*
*Snerk* No kid likes the image of their parents having sex! Draco included!
Yeesh! Horny guy Lucius is isn\'t he?
Lucius the masiochist! *giggle*
And I bet Draco is sitting back cringing at all this!
So somehow Lucius is going to use the bond between Harry & Draco to get rid of Old Moldy? Hmm...
Well that was a fun chapter!
Sev has a point, Draco did wrong stealing Harry\'s wand & his reason for saving Ginny is rather -cen-centred.
Yes, Draco wasn\'t being very careful, he KNOWS there\'s an anti-Slyth prejudice but he uses forbidden spells & is uncaring of anyone outside Slytherin *shakes head* a bit silly!
*Sighs over Draco\'s reaction about healing muggleborns* I\'m not even going to say it.
Oh so Lucius is wiseugh ugh to see the use of a book for muggleborns but Draco can\'t? Just shows Lucius has wisdom Draco doesn\'t!
Okay, something that isn\'t critical commentary about racism & udicudice, \'shotty\'? I think the word you wanted was \'shoddy\'. another reviewer said you needed a beta, you really do. I\'d offer but I work best if it is the first time I\'ve read something, second readings I tend to skim & I\'d miss details.
*Shakes head at the Twins*
*Snerk* No kid likes the image of their parents having sex! Draco included!
Yeesh! Horny guy Lucius is isn\'t he?
Lucius the masiochist! *giggle*
And I bet Draco is sitting back cringing at all this!
So somehow Lucius is going to use the bond between Harry & Draco to get rid of Old Moldy? Hmm...
Well that was a fun chapter!
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July 22, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Page 14: Chapter 13.
Poor Draco, the one misfortune of his bloodline. *Grins*
Really, Pansy did it to herself, shes a vain bitch who is blind to the truth of her relationship with Draco (thinking back to the bit about Draco liking her for her imperfections & going off her when she erased them).
Okay, again a show of how Draco can be a total obnoxious prat with that bit about sitting back & enjoying the show when Pansy tore through his flings.
So Pansy is part Siren?
Well Harry doesn\'t know much because he was muggle-raised not to mention he was raised by the most anti-wizard muggles under the sun!
Well that bit about not getting tired of insulting people is just more proof of how obnoxious Draco is (I won\'t say it\'s a trait of all Slyths in small hopes not are sre such assholes but said hopes are quite small).
So Harry can accept that a minor problem like extra eyes is not as important as other more serious injuries & Draco uses that to bring up the whole \"Boy Who Lived\" crap? Either he\'s blind to the fact that Harry hates it or he\'s being obnoxious as usual!
So Harry loses all sanity because he\'s horny. Typical male!
Harry *gave* it to him? Geez! Draco has such a biased view on events! HE summoned Harry\'s wand & used it without permission & then petrified Harry!
Remy dear, you are waaay too hopeful! Draco ISN\'T changing his ways! He\'s still an obnoxious prat!
con connection does Grindlewald have to the bond between Harry & Draco?
Ohhhh! I see! Well I have to say Draco\'s nastiness towards Harry in the past - not mention the blow of Siri\'s death - wouldn\'t help prevent that.
The problem is how much of that anti-muggleborn sentiment is the cause of Grindlewald? How much of it caused Voldemort? If Harry were to become the next Dark Lord what\'s the bet he would go the other way & strike against purebloods?
The problem with o\'so\'s warnings is when he tries to warn his rivals to stay away from danger his viciousness twists it so said rivals refuse to accept his warning thinking just him being insulting. I think that is exactly what happened on the train at the end of 4th year, he warned them but he did it in a way that it totally offended their beliefs & they saw it as nothing but an insult & reacted. I sit any wonder they hate him? He (in their view) insults them, they react, he systematicly destroys all of them.
Ahh, I\'m starting to see the roots of the Shreiking Shack incident. Circumstanses drove Remus & Severus apart, Remus didn\'t want to lose his closest friends in Hogwarts, somewhere along the line maybe Siri realised what Remus felt about Sev, got jealous & tried to take out the rival for Remus\' affection therefore set in motion the near death incident in the Shack irredeemably royiroying any posibility that Remus could at least establish a friendship (if not a romantic relationship) with Sev. Another irreconcilable mess that has been caused by the generations older than them & has been handed down to the next. If there\'s one thing about this story it\'s how preceeding generations can cause problems for their decendants & how the divide between Gryffindor & Slytherin (and by proxy the whole pureblood issue) ruins people\'s lives.
*Roles eyes* Who says they can get Draco one their side? Draco may get Harry on his (but somehow I just can\'t see that) or they could become the core of a third side that is loyal to neither Voldy or Dumbledore.
Poor Draco, the one misfortune of his bloodline. *Grins*
Really, Pansy did it to herself, shes a vain bitch who is blind to the truth of her relationship with Draco (thinking back to the bit about Draco liking her for her imperfections & going off her when she erased them).
Okay, again a show of how Draco can be a total obnoxious prat with that bit about sitting back & enjoying the show when Pansy tore through his flings.
So Pansy is part Siren?
Well Harry doesn\'t know much because he was muggle-raised not to mention he was raised by the most anti-wizard muggles under the sun!
Well that bit about not getting tired of insulting people is just more proof of how obnoxious Draco is (I won\'t say it\'s a trait of all Slyths in small hopes not are sre such assholes but said hopes are quite small).
So Harry can accept that a minor problem like extra eyes is not as important as other more serious injuries & Draco uses that to bring up the whole \"Boy Who Lived\" crap? Either he\'s blind to the fact that Harry hates it or he\'s being obnoxious as usual!
So Harry loses all sanity because he\'s horny. Typical male!
Harry *gave* it to him? Geez! Draco has such a biased view on events! HE summoned Harry\'s wand & used it without permission & then petrified Harry!
Remy dear, you are waaay too hopeful! Draco ISN\'T changing his ways! He\'s still an obnoxious prat!
con connection does Grindlewald have to the bond between Harry & Draco?
Ohhhh! I see! Well I have to say Draco\'s nastiness towards Harry in the past - not mention the blow of Siri\'s death - wouldn\'t help prevent that.
The problem is how much of that anti-muggleborn sentiment is the cause of Grindlewald? How much of it caused Voldemort? If Harry were to become the next Dark Lord what\'s the bet he would go the other way & strike against purebloods?
The problem with o\'so\'s warnings is when he tries to warn his rivals to stay away from danger his viciousness twists it so said rivals refuse to accept his warning thinking just him being insulting. I think that is exactly what happened on the train at the end of 4th year, he warned them but he did it in a way that it totally offended their beliefs & they saw it as nothing but an insult & reacted. I sit any wonder they hate him? He (in their view) insults them, they react, he systematicly destroys all of them.
Ahh, I\'m starting to see the roots of the Shreiking Shack incident. Circumstanses drove Remus & Severus apart, Remus didn\'t want to lose his closest friends in Hogwarts, somewhere along the line maybe Siri realised what Remus felt about Sev, got jealous & tried to take out the rival for Remus\' affection therefore set in motion the near death incident in the Shack irredeemably royiroying any posibility that Remus could at least establish a friendship (if not a romantic relationship) with Sev. Another irreconcilable mess that has been caused by the generations older than them & has been handed down to the next. If there\'s one thing about this story it\'s how preceeding generations can cause problems for their decendants & how the divide between Gryffindor & Slytherin (and by proxy the whole pureblood issue) ruins people\'s lives.
*Roles eyes* Who says they can get Draco one their side? Draco may get Harry on his (but somehow I just can\'t see that) or they could become the core of a third side that is loyal to neither Voldy or Dumbledore.