rate_review Reviews

Hey, screw the guys who think your 12, cause i like the story (and i\'m 18!!).

GAH! This is a good one. I was kinda like...\"What the hell is this when it first started out but now i can tell that you\'re maturing it up. It\'s so much better! I hope you update soon!!

I want more! Please give me more. *gets on knees* I beg of you I need more.!!!!

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i don\'t think its a bad story at all, its better than reading all that smut.

it\'s not over yet right? coz you made every chapter looks like the end..with draco\'s sweet words :)

Like, OMG, it\'s Harry Potter in the land of dumb-ass valley girls. Since when did Hermione get stupid? how old are you? 12? 13???

This is definitely some of the worst, most confusing writing that I\'ve ever read. You make many spelling and grammatical errors in the first chapter. These are things that even a spell-check would catch. If you are serious about what you write and wish to improve your work, I suggest getting a Beta for your fics (hopefully someone who has been around for awhile and actually knows what they are doing!).

Not to sound too harsh, but I agree with your other reviewers: this sounds like a Harry Potter/Clueless cross-over! I know it is important that every author have their own style, but I would suggest reading LOTS of other fics before attempting any more of your own. See if you can\'t emulate your favorite authors a little bit. Or e-mail them and ask for writing tips.

Very good Draco/Hermione. I loved him kicking Ron\'s a@@.

love it