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Devon writes many very good stories, most of which are never posted due to a meddlesome but well-intentioned friend. If you could see them, you would know her true powers of awesome. But then you wouls all want to be her best friend, and I\'d need a stick of some kind to keep my post. So I pity you. Feel my pity.

Devon, you\'re the definition of hardcore when it comes to fics! This is more great work on your part, and I\'m proud (though unsurprised). You\'re not only my favourite authour on this site, you\'re the best person on it, too. And remember - you\'re not people.

I won\'t say keep writing, \'cause I bet you write in your sleep, but I\'ll say this: It\'s great, you\'re great, and anyone who argues to the contrary will be very sad when I\'m don with them.

Ouch...

I love this story, keep up the great work, coolsa.

well, i really like this story! i have been into the harry potter stories a lot lately! and this seems pretty good! i luv the harry/snape pairing stuff. and yes, i\'m a bit of a perverted person, but only wen i\'m alone in my room, so no need to worry! and, i have reasons to be acting funny, first off, its about 2 in the mornin here! 2. my monthly cycle is cumin up and i\'m havin these fuckin mood swings! i\'m annoyed at yur horrible spelling abilities, they r a little bit.... how shud i put this?.... bad!!! but i\'m too sleep to do much yeelin and stuff like that. but, as u write this stuff, i am thinking u to be atleast older than me, and i know that i wud be able to do way bettur if i was the one writing this stuff! and i guarantee u, i am WAY younger than u! so PLEASE find sum1 to check ovur yur stuff! it is REALLY annoying! anywho, i really thought it was mean the way dumbledore did that to harry, i can totally relate to sumtin like that! but i refuse to tell u y. and no, it wasn\'t anything that was related to rape, or anything like that! it was just a concept thingie. now, wat was i going to say next? oh yea! U NEED TO MAKE YUR CHAPTERS LONGER. wen i saw this story had 34 chappies in it, i was happy i had found one that had progressed so far! but wen i read the whole thing, the chapters were WAY to short for my liking! i do like the idea of stupid vernon getting wat he rightfully deserves!!! i also liked the part where drako was singing to harry, i felt really fuzzy and cuddly. and, it made me feel like sumtin might develope latur in the story between the 2 of them, if that were to happen, it wud be really cool! i\'m not exactly sure how u cud make it happen though. maybe, u cud have him tell dumbledore it was ok to go to the hearing thingie, but wen he came back he was really upset, cuz the daily profit got wind of it, and now the whole wizarding world knows about it, then he gets really upset starts running through the halls for sum reason unbeknownst to me, wen he runs into draco. sumthin cud happen between the 2 of em, and they might hook up. this was JUST A SUGGESTION! i don\'t care if u think it is rediculous or not, i\'m pretty used to being ridiculed, and if u don\'t use it, i will not be angry wit u at all, it is a fanfic about harry and snape after all! well, anyway, i still havta go leave a message on my neopian guild *yes, i\'m on neopets! and no, i won\'t tell anyone my username! but i can say, that my userlookup is WAY AWSUM!!!!!* i don\'t have time to write a lot more, please make the chapters longer from now on, correct yur grammer and spelling, and if possible, start to make draco and harry nice to eachothur, like friends or sumtin. well, i\'m done for the day, so......... toodles!!!!!!!!!!!!! *darn that was the longest review i have evur written!*

sorry, but i forgot to tell u to update soon! i so totally can\'t wait that long!!! and yes, i am adding this to my favrits list, be proud

please remember to put a disclaimer on your story so it isn\'t deleted. I wasnt to know what happens next.

Well, I was so glad to see you update. It\'s nice to see the meddling old coot has a soft spot for the potions master and golden boy. And that he\'s trying to correct past mistakes.

As for Harry, good luck if you write a rape case in the muggle society. The trials are long, hard and emotionally scarring for the victims/survivors, their friends and any jury. It\'s probably one of the worst things to sit through, let alone have to live it. (Sorry, I get a little distraught with something like this) I personally have sat through more rape trials than I care to remember. Never having had one of my own since I never pressed charges has a way of bringing light to a subject that hopefully no one should ever endure.

Anyway, sorry off topic. Great job on this chapter. I didn\'t notice any mistakes but then again it\'s late, I\'ve been up for around 20 hours now and my brain function is depleting.

I do hope you update again soon. I look forward to reading more.

Please, keep dancing! We do! Anyway, this is Josh (cause I distracted Missi with my wallet and promises of Wal Mart) and I just wanted to point out that I am paying for my denial of HBP with denial of Sex. Still. Hence the distraction-I normally limit her Wal Mart excursions because we have so many things we don\'t need. How many bottles of shampoo does one household really need? (I\'m guessing not 15-at least-in each of the three bathrooms. Although we DO never run out of toilet paper or Laundry soap) Thanks from Missi for the birthday wishes, and Happy Birthday for whenever yours is! Cause she\'s just like that. This chapter was amazing, and we loved the nervous explaination of Mr. Lenny\'s previous crime! Can\'t wait to see how Severus convinces Harry to testify. Will Draco and Harry\'s pets have a playdate soon? (bet you thought we forgot about that, huh?) This update was amazing as usual, which is good because then we\'re never disappointed. Ok, so now Missi wants to know what your favorite kind of muffins are-I\'m getting scared.

Chameshi is rice with a flavored tea poured over it like gravvy, Sometimes the rice has a little bit of tea but is meshed into a rice ball, and is a very popular item of food. And this chapter was really neat ^_^ Your grammer is great though, I don\'t have a single problem understanding you. So if anyone complains, I wonder what they see? o.o Please do update! and thanks for adding me onto your list n_n I look forward to your story more! -gives snape plushie-

oooh im luving this-- more soon please!!

This is an interesting storyline, but the presentation is awful. You need an editor/beta person that knows what they\'re doing. Or you need to write your stories in Microsoft Word, then use the grammar and spell checking function. Or read Strunk and White\'s \'Elements of Style\' before you post again. Then put your paragraphs and sentences together correctly before you post.

It\'s entirely too difficult to read the way it is, and detracts from the original thought and the plot, which is, or could be, quite good if you had the basics down. If you truly want to improve your skills, I\'d suggest taking the whole thing down, editing it properly, then reposting it. Use the skills you were taught in school, and the book listed above.