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February 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The fact that your story actually has two stars utterly profounds me. In what world, does a paragraph a chapter make sense? In what world does poor narration, characters, setting, dialogue equate with GOOD writing?!? Some suggestions, a beta but also, an actual story, and not \"plot notes.\" If you believe this is a good, less you believe its great, I am sorry to inform you, you\'d be wrong. It isn\'t even due necessarily to bad grammar, bad sentences, bad plot...because there is not even a story!
0_o You know, \"being emaciated\" is not the best thing to be, especially if you are writing a story. Flesh, is okay. You\'re not going to get fat jokes because of the thickness of pages, were this story printed. In writing, \"thickness\" is irrelevant, to a point.
If you want an appropriate review, write an appropriate story.
*takes a deep breath*
0_o You know, \"being emaciated\" is not the best thing to be, especially if you are writing a story. Flesh, is okay. You\'re not going to get fat jokes because of the thickness of pages, were this story printed. In writing, \"thickness\" is irrelevant, to a point.
If you want an appropriate review, write an appropriate story.
*takes a deep breath*