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July 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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June 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters? Or can you write a sequel to this story please?
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March 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
it reads a bit rushed, i don\'t knwo if you were having trouble expressing yourself while writting it or not, but it seems hurried.
It\'s lacking structure and flow, and it leaves me wanting.
It\'s a good attempt, but it just doesn\'t feel like a finished piece.
keep in mind, this is meant as constructive critisism, and should be taken as such. I am in no way bashing your piece at all, just offering my opinion, for what it\'s worth.
It\'s lacking structure and flow, and it leaves me wanting.
It\'s a good attempt, but it just doesn\'t feel like a finished piece.
keep in mind, this is meant as constructive critisism, and should be taken as such. I am in no way bashing your piece at all, just offering my opinion, for what it\'s worth.
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March 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hello
ummm...Well I did like it. I would have loved more detail. It wasnt really erotic in any way. But I did enjoy the idea of it and the writing was very good.
TaintedAngel xxx
ummm...Well I did like it. I would have loved more detail. It wasnt really erotic in any way. But I did enjoy the idea of it and the writing was very good.
TaintedAngel xxx