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Why did you stop there? The prophecy repeats the first line at the end. Does that mean that HP has to destroy two Dark Lords?

Is it a co-incidence that AD was involved with bringing both Grindlewald and Riddle to power or where they a smoke screen?

Grindlewald had the wand, AD put him in prison and took the wand. (GGwas the last of his line!)

Riddle had the ring. AD tried to defeat him and failed (TMR was the last of his line) and then set up the Potters (who had the cloak). HP (the last of his line too!) survived to defeat Riddle. If AD had survived in canon, what would he have done to get the cloak from HP?

This was okay. A lot of bad grammar. What really bothered me though was the adults treating Harry and draco like children. It always bugs me when people have Harry and Draco obeying their every rule and having to tell them everything. I just can stand it, they didn't get a moment of peace because Dumbledore, Narcissa and Remus were all up in their faces. They should have realized that Harry and Draco didn't need to be babyed anymore they were pretty much adults themselves.

well i don't know what that person thought but i think you write a good story, a bit on the short side i admit but all the same great.

Calamite: prehistoric plant like tree: a plant that grew in the Paleozoic era, related to the horsetail.

Catamite: young partner of gay man: a boy kept by a man for sexual intercourse (literary).

Look up words before you just decide to just use them.

I am sorry about the bad review This is a good story that promises to get better In a magic world with witches, elves veelas wizards etc there is no homosexuality it simply does not exist and magical people/ creatures can have babys keep up the good work

I can tell you this...I have just read the 4th chapter and I am not a 12 year old (like our beloved "fan fic whore")...not that there is anything wrong with 12 year olds ;)..but I enjoy your story thus far and if I stop enjoying it I will stop reading it. People who feel the need to berate writers that don't strike the fancy need a hobby, badly. Your story is realistic, for it's setting and nothing tops the spontinaity of "real life". well done.

Damn, I thought there might be a happy ending. Damn Dumbledore, what the hell is he up to?

I think this story is fantastic...just found it and read it all in one day. I think you should definitely put Sirius's portrait where his mum used to be...poetic justice, don't you think? I am a new writer...haven't submitted here at aff before but have written one story in the lord of the rings rps realm. I hope you continue on with this story...I am really enjoying it...and don't be so hard on yourself about the grammer and stuff...the story itself shines through that anyway! Good luck with everything!!

This story is soo adorable! I was sad when Lucius(sp?) died, just when he was growing a set and defying Voldemort. And I almost swallowed my tongue when Draco reverted back to the malfoy mask. I was really worried there for a moment, but it all turned out right in the end. And Dumbledore being able to take their magic anytime he want? That is probably why he was asking so many questions before they left, cause he wants to wait until the right time to siphon the magic. And I would have you know that your grammer is 10 times better than a good majority of the fanfic I read. I mean, these are stories written for the entertainment of the writer and the reader both. How much pleasure can one get from writing if you're constanly worried about grammer and such? And why would someone want to read a story where the person sounds like they are anal retentive, obsessing over the smallest grammer point? I prefer it when the story sounds natural, and your story is a well written example of this.

hey, i just your a/n at the beginning and i would like to say that i am not twelve, i know quite a bit about fanfiction, and i do not pity you. that said, i like the premise for your story, it's simple and interesting. im also kinda glad its not another creature fic. i mean i LOVE creature fics (you know, Draco finds out he is a Veela, and must mate with Harry or die) but it can get a little overdone. so, dont listen to stupid flamers that hate themselves and decide to take it out on more talented authors than themselves.
good luck with your writing,
Gaia
p.s. updates are your friend