rate_review Reviews

I\'m liking the story thus far. You could prolong the sex with Mike, as the previous reviewer suggested, and allow the readers to become more attached to him. Or you could just get to the sex. But it would be great if you planned to continue the story for a while at Hogwarts- Hermione becoming attracted to/seducing/being seduced by some male student of your choosing. Happy writing!

you werent kidding when you said that you didnt know where to go...lol.... One of my personal problems with OFC (mike in this story) is that you dont automatically care about them, or know their back history like say a Draco, and that makes them harder for us as the reader, to understand why little virgin bookworm hermione would suddenly decided to gift him with her virginity. So PWPs are harder with someone we dont \"know\"

Now I like your writing style, it shows maturity and that you know how to engage the reader and know good sentence structure. If this were me writing this story, I would slow them down a bit, no sex at first, and show (other than he is cute) why Hermione is so mesmerized by him. I know people write Hermione like a sudden slut , sometimes, but it just never makes sense to me. there you go, my quick 2 cents, for what they are worth.

have em screw in the pool and on the grass

more!!! that was very cool...er, hot! Want to see more of Mike, and then what happens when Hermione goes back to school (whether he somehow pops up again or not).

i really like this so far, it\'s well written and sexy in a sweet way. I suppose the obvious opinion for how you could continue is sex. Maybe in the pool?

It\'s all good. Please post more.