schedule
May 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hi, I just read your fic and like it a lot, but I would like to point something that caught my attention.
Nothing bad, really, this is not a flame.
It\'s just that you say that Harry is four, but he argues about the fact that abandoning a four year old is against the law and he will call his uncle\'s boss, also he makes a lot of money for a 4 y.o. (and he buys cookbooks?). He is a four year old, he can know about wicca by hearing about it, he may know that is wrong to leave a child alone or hurt the child but he won\'t bring the law in, in most cases the child thinks she is the one doing something wrong, something like \"what have I done to receive this?\".
The plot for your fic is very good, but you could improve on how the charactes behave.
Again, I DO LIKE YOUR FIC and I hope I didn\'t ruined for you. I look forward to read some more.
Nothing bad, really, this is not a flame.
It\'s just that you say that Harry is four, but he argues about the fact that abandoning a four year old is against the law and he will call his uncle\'s boss, also he makes a lot of money for a 4 y.o. (and he buys cookbooks?). He is a four year old, he can know about wicca by hearing about it, he may know that is wrong to leave a child alone or hurt the child but he won\'t bring the law in, in most cases the child thinks she is the one doing something wrong, something like \"what have I done to receive this?\".
The plot for your fic is very good, but you could improve on how the charactes behave.
Again, I DO LIKE YOUR FIC and I hope I didn\'t ruined for you. I look forward to read some more.
schedule
May 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
good story
schedule
May 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*grins* i like your take on this challenge! Please hurry and write more.
schedule
May 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like how you are taking this story and I can\'t wait to see how you take it the rest of the way.