rate_review Reviews

my story is sooo sad! :(( tell me if you want another!

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Very good, I liked it. It made me sad though. =(

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It\'s a good start. Try reading it aloud to yourself, though. Some of the grammar and spelling need minor tweaks (Just like all of mine). I like the idea, and it is quite dark. Try fleshing it out a bit with more detail. Perhaps slide in some scenes via memories as he\'s being carried?

Good luck. Drop me a line when/if you update!

Ahh that is a sad story but a good one. Though i think you might have wanted to use Taken and not tooken.