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Well... I have trouble reading your fanfiction... I don't know whether you realized or not, but your whole fanfiction is very badly formatted. There are formatting mistakes everywhere and are in the way of reading your FF.

I read the first two chapters - but then everything went wrong with the formation... Please fix that. Otherwise reading and enjoying your actual fanfiction is hard...

Word of advice, don't change point or view. It's not necessary, it takes from the story, makes it confusing and hard to read and I really do want to read this story, but the constant change of views irks me enough then I almost don't want to. Keep it third person, or in one character's point of view. You can chance point of view with a new chapter, but personally I'd recommend you just stick to third person.
Just in case you don't actually know (gotta remember that not everyone's parents are english teachers ><) third person is 'he, she, they' etc. First is 'I, me, we' and second is 'you, your'.

good story

to good

Don't change POV so often, and definitely don't label POV's.

Hope you will update your fics soon. I read all three of them and I like them sooooo much.

you updated!! cheers claps and screams whooooooooooooo yea !!! great chapter oooo now thats nasty, i would love this story if this story you make harry a submissive! and Snape his dom

wow great story please more

angel

please update cant wait for more! whats gonna happen?!!

please update!!! pleaseplease i cheak every day!