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for The boy he didn't know

by Draconix

person Jamy
schedule August 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
aww, your english really isn\'t that bad. What\'s your original Language then?
I love this story btw, I think it\'s rather endearing. I hope you\'ll continue it soon!
person thrnbrooke
schedule August 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Still waiting for chapter 4! Please continue! I honestly thought Harry was going to jump. Thank goodness that wasn\'t the case. Maybe instead of acting the same ole way Draco might try being a friend. That\'s what he wants. Isn\'t it?
person Celece
schedule July 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Beautiful. Charming. Perfect. I use these three words to discribe your story, cause there are non more suiting in this world. Your language is not bad, never heard of it. It`s poetic, like a river floating in piece. The telling is floating as well, not forced, but natural. I cried while reading the last chapter, not cause of the happenings, but cause of the whole scene. The sunrice that Harry was waiting for, that was the mainissue. I could feel him waiting for it, and that it would bring the light into his day. What if the sun wouln`t rice one morning? I started thinking about that. He would die. He would slowly faid away.
And I have no idea why I`m writing all this down when I should be reviwing your story. I just couln`t help it. You made me feel this way with your words, and that`s amazing. I got touched also by the fact that Draco was killing Harry with his words, but himself as well.
Your story has nothing that I can complain about. So what if there are a few minor mistakes in the language. It`s important to have the ability to sink into the story. I drowned in it.
person thrnbrooke
schedule July 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh I loved it! Either way. Might be nice to see Harry\'s thoughts once in awhile but I like Draco\'s thoughts, feelings and words. I can\'t wait for chapter 4!
person Jaided
schedule July 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
One word, Stunning. You have a great talent. I hope Draco and Harry eventually fall into step. It\'s torture following in the shadows, wondering if they will ever see eachother clearly. I also hope Draco can come to his senses and just be a little more gentle with Harry. Can\'t he see that Harry is on the edge of a major break??? Great story, update soon??
person Demon
schedule July 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
aww that is so beautiful!!
person Draconis
schedule July 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That is sooooo great! I love this! You\'re an excellent writer.
Maybe you can now switch to Harry\'s POV-- the way he sees things. That would be interesting!
person Rayline_
schedule July 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The way Harry acts confuses me o.O so maybe a view into his mind would be nice but still.. if you want to keep his behaviour a mystery I would keep it in Draco\'s view. I think It\'s good in his view o.O But it\'s your story so you can decide what you wanna do with it of course :P I like it, and I think it\'s good because most fictions make Draco stop insulting him and I rather like the fact he\'s still mean ^,^
person MornMeril
schedule July 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i really like your style, and don\'t worry your english is just fine.
i would like you to keep writing from Draco\'s POV. you do so well woth him-
i hope it gets less sad soon, i\'m really depressed and thoughtful after reading this...
anyways, great job, keep it up!
cheers
person Narcissa Black
schedule July 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I think this fic is very compelling, but I don\'t know what a shilling is, except in money? Help me out.

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