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August 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful, really.
Of course, it could be better with more descriptions and a few improvements here and there.
A rewrite, as you suggested, would be most welcome.
Of course, it could be better with more descriptions and a few improvements here and there.
A rewrite, as you suggested, would be most welcome.
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July 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I think that\'s a fair criticism, Saico. I am thinking of doing a rewrite on it. Thanks for reviewing.
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July 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I liked the theme, but everything was too fast. I don\'t mind it was a PWP, but you must be more descriptive about stripping and other parts to make it erotic.
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July 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Fun and sexy.